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The Deer
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The Deer |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
The old deer approaches the river He is fearful and apprehensive of the stream Long ago he has withered his eyes turning an absent grey His mind is always on the verge of awakening but the forest is closing in around him The night is coming Thoughts of another time cascade around him As he searches for a place to rest his open mind Once he was nimble and youth was intoxicating A drink from the purest source He could freely escape the forest and the night All of that has passed and his eyes open to reveal the morning He aches and yet remains proud His eyes and mind fixated on passing clouds Soon it will be time to find another temporary home The rain will come and wash away all thats spent Flushing all the tin cans and broken cigarettes down the stream Towards an empty outlet Somewhere near his dim recollections Where perhaps a hunter waits asleep in a deep dream Of a grey eyed deer watching passing clouds... New lovers are nervous and tender, but smash everything. For the heart is an organ of fire |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Being a non-hunter myself, I find this to be a very powerful write. Interesting to see something written that takes into account the view of the prey. One living creature simply wants to survive and the other finds pleasure in the kill...which one is the true animal? It's a talented piece...enjoyed.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Indeed, putting one's self behind the eyes of another, be it human, or beast...is a wonderful way to get a new perspective. I ditto 'Deer...it is a very good write! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This makes me feel for the animal portrayed, and all of us who grow old and tired. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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