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Hymns That Cattails Play
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Hymns That Cattails Play |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Instead, they waved To the passing breeze And sang against the wind Waiting it seemed For someone new to join in As brown heads bobbed slightly With the brush of skin We walked then Hand in hand through heated afternoons To find that place just up from Franklin’s Mill Where the river slowed and fell to wait For the next rush of rapid Hard stoned as it was There we slipped in And let cool play upon bare skin Wiling away the play With touches Teased out of smiles Till internal heat drove us to shore And we listened to the hymns Cattails played on reeds And wind |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
incredible |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Absolutely excellent. *S* We all win at this game! *S* |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Instead, they waved To the passing breeze And sang against the wind Waiting it seemed For someone new to join in As brown heads bobbed slightly With the brush of skin We walked then Hand in hand through heated afternoons To find that place just up from Franklin’s Mill Where the river slowed and fell to wait For the next rush of rapid Hard stoned as it was There we slipped in And let cool play upon bare skin Wiling away the play With touches Teased out of smiles Till internal heat drove us to shore And we listened to the hymns Cattails played on reeds And wind ~*~ Even the redwings sit in silence just for this very song... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
jaw dropped to the ground... ok...so when I pick it up again I will be back to give it the praise it deserves... DAMN Ron....yer good! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The tone of this....so very much at peace with the memory. This is a textbook example of how to move a poem while holding it steady. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
....amazing. I'm trying to catch my breath. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is great work! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh my goodness....what a keeper this jewel of a write is!! Excellent. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Magnificient and romantic... The woodwind player in me thought this was very pretty and witty at the same time. "And we listened to the hymns Cattails played on reeds And wind" [This message has been edited by miscellanea (09-08-2004 05:47 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Fan-bloody-tastic! woohoo. I'm keeping it. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
sssshhhhhhhhhhh . . . |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron I'm not sure how I missed this poem...so glad to see it today. I do miss your poetry so much!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I had missed this one too, Martie. So glad you brought it back.  missing his heart writes in blue |
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