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Stray Cat |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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I'm beginning to worry for you; you came on the season's turn with the eyes of a fire, i assumed you'd be off by now with wishes blown on spring's dandelion, it rained last night; and beside my sleepless pillow i could feel you, a faceful of eyes, as you now count on the kindess that dwells in my heart's embrace, the storm played above me in a dousing of bricks, it haunted the rooftop and slumber came sporadic, blinking between traffic lights, you stayed on my thoughts throughout in the harshness of the nighthours, and i prayed you found shelter until the light of the morning would reconnect our tossed destinies, i'm beginning to worry for you; summer's barely lamented, and i'm becoming encrcled in your faceful of eyes, raging with fire, battling the blindness of winter. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah... more than a bit of heart here..and layers of meaning which can be layed upon the words.. nicely done ma'am... nice indeed |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very metaphoric...wonderful visuals...done with elegance and charm Interesting write, held my attention all the way through, wondering how it was going to end. Good jobber! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
strays these days have all the fun .... ...a captivating write. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
summer's barely lamented, and i'm becoming encrcled in your faceful of eyes, raging with fire, battling the blindness of winter Man I love those lines!! I am keepin' this beauty. Hugs, Chris  "At one glance |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful imagery once again Michele! Love this and into my library it goes! Hugs~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Daniel Storm Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 91New York |
Nice, like the touch of winter in your ending. (not much good with critiques) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
A beautiful intro to the harshness of the coming season . . . May it be a mild one . . .  Michele |
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milkweed Junior Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 42fields of gold |
This is such a reflection of feelings. There is so much here. I like your writing style. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks as always for stopping by |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh I like this one! So many ways this can be read, and all of them good. Great images. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the changing of seasons inspires great poetry, yes, like this |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ah... you know I have two kittens I would love to find a home for, right??? lol This was so very touching.... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
liked this very nice |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, I really really enjoyed this. I think I'll keep it. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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PassionandFun Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 60 |
Nice job once again. Really evoked deep images in my mind and my soul! Wow! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks so much kids for stopping by |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Layers within layers, and all gently introspective, where you're truly at your best...I like this very much. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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