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Kristabell
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since 2003-11-29
Posts 678
Portland, OR

0 posted 2004-09-08 03:12 AM



Green grass grows,
Soft lushous reads,
Felt between the toes.

Bright Flowers bloom,
A vorioty of colors,
Styfening the eyes gloom.

The birds sweet saranade,
Such a peaceful song,
Cleansing every harsh memory made.

Clean fresh air,
Refreshes the nose,
Of stale smells, not known were there.

A light rain falls,
The taste is so sweet,
A parched tongue calls.

A heart wheeps,
For what is only seen in dreams...

A lonely girl wakes,
Invisioning her dream,
Searching for a way,
To find that perfect paradise,
If only for one day?

© Copyright 2004 Kristabell - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2004-09-09 12:49 PM


Nice writing...sometimes I would settle for a not perfect paradise...James
DavePage
Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-09-09 12:48 PM


Nice talent.

Can I suggest you put it into word and use spell checker.

I do when I remember.

Like the words, like the talent.

Dave

sim0riah
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since 2004-09-07
Posts 253
Wyoming USA
3 posted 2004-09-09 12:58 PM


The birds sweet saranade,
Such a peaceful song,
Cleansing every harsh memory made.

That is nice..Well done

sim0riah

Only at night you can see the depth of the sun

Sim0riah

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