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Prize and Ponies
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Prize and Ponies |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ I'm a needle in a hay stack stuck between a crate and barrel, the dark side of your light side a worn out hide too tanned. I'm a smile too wide to brand you spread across your skyline, another hand to fetch your dreams when your heart breaks down and dies. I'm a fickle feather in your cap like you're the ribbons around my halo, caught in the rain that fell too soon casting shadows through my window. But I'll not tiptoe 'cross your chest or rip apart your belt loops, I've seen your change of colors and the danger zone you dare. I'm cool water in a trough where you show your prize and ponies to sip until they've had enough leading to a wishing well; filled with superficial tears. ~*~ |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
Beautiful imagery. You have an awesome gift. Keep it up. I want to be the ribbons of my love's halo one day. Whoever she'll be. She can be the bright wings on my back. - Haze |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bluesy -- I thought this was SO GOOD -- I started to pull verses to show you my favorites, but it would have been the whole poem. So, I'm just going to put it all in my library. Really good one.  ....jo |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Bluesy - Your words are always worth waiting for. Thank you. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
All that and a whole lot more. Beautifully done, Lori. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I'm a needle in a hay stack stuck between a crate and barrel, the dark side of your light side a worn out hide too tanned. I'm a smile too wide to brand you spread across your skyline, another hand to fetch your dreams when your heart breaks Honeybunch said it best hon.. you ARE so very worth the wait. Love your words, always. a worn out hide too tanned. Worn out, hon, you are never worn out, you just keep gettin better and better like vintage wine dear gal. HUGS YOU |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, I've missed these metaphoric visuals of yours...simply divine senses you project...lovely write |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow Bluesy!! This is one awesome write... you just keep getting better and better! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I'm a smile too wide to brand you spread across your skyline Wow lady of the blues! I am keepin' this gem of a write!! hugs. Chris  "At one glance |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugsssss you.... I don’t want the world to see me |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"I'm a smile too wide" yep, that's you! Rf |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Bluesy, I love your spirit and wit, Lady! How can I not take this to the library? Outstanding in its individuality! miscellanea |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
just giving you a little push-up *s M |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, You paint pictures that I love to see and then you brighten them more than anyone could. You're the best and this is wonderful. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beautiful you indeed |
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