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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-09-06 08:49 PM


I’ll write and post this because some words come and you want them seen and this is about wild birds

Sun touching the ego
Waggling down
On a nest of bark

Dove
Change from windsurfing
On the seed box

Finches eating the plants
Of chickweed
They planted before

Scurrying
Hurrying
Cat biscuits for some
Raisins for others

How long will the peace last

How long before a small refuge
Leaves

And a feeling of guilt
Because we don’t control
What the birds do

No matter
What we think



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ecrivan
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1 posted 2004-09-06 11:09 PM


I wouldn't say guilt as much as helplessness
for not being in that control...good write


iliana
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2 posted 2004-09-07 12:10 PM


No feeling of guilt here.  I love what the birds do.  As a results of birds visiting my yard, I now have wild plum trees, a wild tomato plant, a wild pepper plant, and a beautiful old fashioned rose bush.  I am grateful they roam free.  Dave, it is so good to see you here again.  I've missed your writing.  I really enjoyed your keen observations in this poem and the way you put it together.   ....jo
DavePage
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3 posted 2004-09-07 05:10 PM


Thanks for your comments

I suppose I have used my usual bombastic know it all style

regards

Dave

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