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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ I couldn't have been more relieved when you said you didn't beg. It wasn't what I was looking for or aspire to bring to the surface, It's more to do with the way I felt about you. Unlike this little game that you're playing fashioned to suit yourself in a pinch, tapping into my naivety in order to gain the upper hand, as if I'd never lost before. Fair is only fair when it's genuine and I can't tell anymore. Contrary to popular belief, I don't need to love you, even if I wanted to, nor do I have any illusions that you would admire me for it. You see, I've landed on the line too many times, and hopscotch is but a child's game I never learned how to play. Only now do I understand it's a lot easier to skip it and I'm just as good to go, without you. Got chalk? ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (09-04-2004 11:18 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Love the ending...besides with chalk you can always erase by washing it down... good to see you,  M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bluesy, I am so proud of you! That'a girl! Missed reading you lately as I've been out a bit. I really liked your use of a child's game to get your point across; and the title....perfect! .......jo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Is the chalk needed to make hopscotch squares or a body outline? If this person persits in trying to fool you, he may be the one outlined, at least mentally... Nicely expressed .....  ------ice ><> Come read to me some poem, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Yup Blusie, You still put a smile on my face! I too love the ending and always your spirit. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this one Bluesy!! Yes..chalk can always be erased. The thought makes me grin...and giggle. Hugs and good to read you again. ~ Summer can't be over... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks so much for reading this, M, iliana, ford, Larry Dear, and Nancy. Never had what they call beginners luck, been trying to get it right for a long time now. I swear, you would think I'm wearing a sign on my forehead, "easy target" or a "sure bet" *shrug* A seasoned player I'm not, but I can skip it with the best of em!  Happy Sunday, and hugs all around. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 you go girl! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Hey Bluesy: This was excellent...in creation and delivery. Very cool write. TD |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Very clever. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
So nice to read you again, Bluesy gal. Sounds as if you've been building up to skip and hop through life. My best to you. |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
wow i really loved the part about the hopscotch, it really tied everything together. good job, keep writing! -kelly we all need mirrors to remind ourselves who we really are. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You see, I've landed on the line too many times, and hopscotch is but a child's game I never learned how to play. Only now do I understand it's a lot easier to skip it and I'm just as good to go, without you. Got chalk? Ya got me smilin here Ms Blues, it's always a pleasure to read you. Nice to see you Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I've got a whole box....will share it with you....  sweet ladyI don’t want the world to see me |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
keep up the playful spirit |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
I guess you didn't get it from Ross. Gottchalks. Heh. Manipulative people suck. Too bad I'm one of them. Please people..forgive me and so shall you be forgiven. see? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Same for me -- and for a guy the penalties are much greater....step outside those lines and you not only lose, you've gotta listen to the nimble-footed girls mock you in unison.... But those are the rules, lines are drawn and if you cross them, your turn's over....and it seemed like I was always the one who had to draw those lines before the game, like having to go and cut the stick they spank you with. Still, the very next recess I'd let 'em talk me into it again.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is fantastically said throughout! However, this section is absolutely priceless: You see, I've landed on the line too many times, and hopscotch is but a child's game I never learned how to play. Only now do I understand it's a lot easier to skip it and I'm just as good to go, without you. Got chalk? Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you all for your nice replies, they are very much appreciated. Sincerely~ |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Caulk I use is for another game To smooth my cue’s tip, But it will mark just the same And even still my hand might slip For a game is just a game And emotions are not the same. Enjoyed the poem Gloom |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
For a game is just a game And emotions are not the same. Thanks for that, Professor Gloom~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Only now do I understand it's a lot easier to skip it and I'm just as good to go, without you. Got chalk? oh Lord gal, you have written my past year in life! love this, you go gal! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
With this delightful write, you are more of a "Whimsy" than a "Bluesy"! lol No matter the tone, I love your writing! May I borrow some of your chalk if the need ever arises?  Big hug and an even bigger SMILE! Linda |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Donna and Linda for your kind words and whimsy? That's one way to look at it! Hugs to you both~ |
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