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Susan
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0 posted 2004-09-02 01:50 AM


Would that words could tell you
How my heart beats as a drum
Each count marking its celebration
Of the treasure you’ve become

I would round these words into a chorus
With angelic voices ringing upon high
Caroling of the blessings you gift to me
By your simply being by my side

I would weave these words into a tapestry
Stitched of threads most beauteous and fair
Richly hued with the vibrant colors of you
Into a work most precious and rare

I would work these words into a sculpture
Of finest marble, white and pure
That would reflect the very heart of thee
Your goodness, your honor, your allure

But my words, they fail to compensate
To rise to the challenge set forth
For you are a gem far beyond compare
Beyond any words found upon this Earth.

s.a.t.

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

© Copyright 2004 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-09-02 04:14 AM


what a beautiful tribute!
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2 posted 2004-09-02 10:43 AM


Nothing inadequate at all!
JamesMichael
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3 posted 2004-09-02 05:54 PM


Excellent...beautiful flow of words...James
E S West
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4 posted 2004-09-02 06:05 PM


someone is very lucky to have such words awarded him....
                      E S West

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5 posted 2004-09-02 06:23 PM


Most certainly a very genuine and ernest
statement of another.  Someone has been
given a beautiful gift...perhaps you as
well...Yes,  I think so!

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2004-09-02 06:29 PM


Susan~
So tenderly presented with such adore~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Susan
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7 posted 2004-09-02 07:30 PM


Thank you for your kind comments my friends-

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

iliana
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8 posted 2004-09-02 09:53 PM


Susan, this was so lovely.  I've been missing reading you (been real busy working and still a bit more to do on a special project...but I am going to try to take more breaks.  So I'll be in an out, here and there for awhile yet).  BTW, whoever you wrote this for should feel very honored.   ....jo
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9 posted 2004-09-02 10:22 PM


goodness this is lovely

"I would round these words into a chorus
With angelic voices ringing upon high
Caroling of the blessings you gift to me
By your simply being by my side"

Susan
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10 posted 2004-09-03 12:01 PM


Thanks Jo and Susan -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Rick
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11 posted 2004-09-03 07:47 AM


Words spoken from the heart are the purest and ones with the most meaning, don't under sell yourself, your words speak loud and clear. Well done dear friend, take care.

Sincerely
Rick

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2004-09-03 07:56 AM


purdy words
purdy heart

purdy girl

nuff said

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2004-09-03 07:58 AM


Nothing inadequate at all about this...
just lovely Susan!

Susan
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14 posted 2004-09-03 12:04 PM


Rick, Dark, and Donna - your words so warm my heart - thank you.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2004-09-04 07:23 PM


Fine...fine adequate writing...James
ShiningWindHaze
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16 posted 2004-09-06 08:20 AM


How can you be so deep? I never thought I'd come in contact with someone who can see things as deep as I can. It's really awesome how you describe how you feel. You paint with your words a picture so beautiful I fall into a void of your talent and don't want to escape.

Susan
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17 posted 2004-09-06 11:39 AM


James- thank you

ShiningWindHaze- it pleases me greatly to be able to share and to touch another soul.  

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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