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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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0 posted 2004-09-01 11:34 AM


Caution throws well thought-out adventures
Into design…like crowds of orcas shrieking
Reds and gold, on the wings of ocean
Cluttering sensations of sweet evenings
And afternoon infusions of fat boats
Which never shiver in starless nights

I loosen my leather jacket and become
The last day of my life
Carrying all words uphill
Trusting numerous headaches
With minimal view, anything but dull

Light through the umbrella tree leaves
Depicts a mystic quantum fuel
Flickering on and off
Like the ivy I’d forgotten made
Weather patterns & roman numerals

Notice how radiant fullness derives from empty
Like a transitional power in the right hand
On a printed page of white flares
Droplets of intricate colors wash away
Forming again...warm nights that don’t shiver
Falling together, we become the lights we live by
Will you help me buy a vessel?
Touching the clear small space between us?

[This message has been edited by LeeJ (09-01-2004 12:43 PM).]

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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2004-09-01 12:08 PM


~smiling~ at how your words are always so enlightening

M

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2004-09-01 12:39 PM


I can't even express how I am in awe at how you do it
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3 posted 2004-09-01 02:23 PM


I loosen my leather jacket and become
The last day of my life
Carrying all words uphill
Trusting numerous headaches
With minimal view, anything but dull

This verse is so striking! *S* I enjoy your work! *S*

E S West
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since 2004-08-31
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California
4 posted 2004-09-01 03:48 PM


how well you use words, wonderful to read...

                 E S West

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2004-09-02 05:46 PM


Enjoyed....James
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