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0 posted 2004-09-01 03:05 AM



Tender


good bye summer
if I didn’t say that
I wouldn’t miss you
it would be such a lie
but I was not who
you wanted me to be
and past breezes have
touched too deeply
beneath this skin
even when I was
the only one that felt it
I have known your warmth
and it taught me, after it
there is such an echo of cold
winter calls me and I must go
so what I can feel again
after it is tender

just some words cut out
from the diary of my heart



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2 posted 2004-09-01 02:16 PM


even when I was
the only one that felt it
I have known your warmth

I feel the shiver of knowing as I read this... excellent work!!

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3 posted 2004-09-02 09:49 AM


Tender.... a perfect word to describe it, and a perfect word for the way you handled the expression of it in this poem. Not bringing in any expectation or blame, just....tender.

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