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Corinne
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0 posted 2004-08-31 02:16 PM




This will be no ordinary fall –
autumnal hues whipped by dust,
first raindrops splashed on windows
cleansing the face of things,

and crack-crack of thunder,
a storm eager to electrify,
to dance with a frenzied sea;

the pitch of time as it closes,
old songs the body
has heard before,
not soft, never soft,

salt and sand

castling
to final strains.

[This message has been edited by Corinne (08-31-2004 04:04 PM).]

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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-08-31 02:18 PM


when waves lap over curbs
to flood streets,
surges sand castling,

into final strains,
into grains.


damn Cor.....OUTSTANDING.
I dont believe there is anything you have ever written that I havent found to be done with perfection.  I enjoyed this immensely..

Corinne
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2 posted 2004-08-31 02:28 PM


Oh Gentle Spirit, you've just made me smile. Thank you!!!

Corinne

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3 posted 2004-08-31 05:06 PM


Your poetry is striking Corinne, you always fill me with wonder and admiration.

You're amazing.

It's a keeper.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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4 posted 2004-08-31 06:36 PM


You know, my poet, that when I was growing up in the central/southern, I don't remember any rainstorms that brought with it lightning and thunder.  It just...rained.  I remember one "quiet storm" that lasted several weeks.

It will be good to walk some of that dirt again, soon.  It will be good to be home in the Fall.

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5 posted 2004-08-31 07:14 PM


Corinne~

'crack-crack of thunder,
a storm eager to electrify,
to dance with a frenzied sea'


Your penned thoughts are truly electrifying, my friend~
I feel the all of this~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 2004-09-01 05:08 PM


Gosh... I so miss your awesome poetry when you're gone from these pages for very long. I think I'm truly one of your biggest fans!!!
Incredible write dear friend

Corinne
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7 posted 2004-09-04 12:44 PM


Thank you Maree, you are such a kind person!


Karilea, I grew up in San Diego, and we did have our share of thunderstorms, mostly in late August and September, when remnants of tropical storms made their way up from the Baja Penninsula. This storm, though, is more of my own imagining, due to the illness of my stepdad. Right now, he's in that calm eye of things, but barring a miracle, this cancer will probably take him within a few months.


Marge - how the heck are 'ya, gal? thank you!

Ruth, It's great to see you here again! I've always been a huge admirer of your poetry as well -- and thank you!!!

Corinne

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