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Martie
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0 posted 2004-08-29 08:21 PM



Before the Dim

light a candle before the dim

a laugh just splashed and left the pool
empty           though
one ripple remains

a lantern over the well  
no goodbye
yet sweet echo is caught of final breath
gone the flesh

too close this recall that touches
the laugh     the music lives

cannot grieve

I see his hold still gripped on light
yet I know that it is night


light a candle before the dim

tell a feeling when
don’t wait

the gate that swings on whim
when closed will be too late
_________
reposted in memory of Robert

© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-08-29 08:25 PM


I see his hold still gripped on light
yet I know that it is night


light a candle before the dim

~*~

Lighting, remembering, holding.

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2 posted 2004-08-29 08:34 PM


I will help hold it too... a sad and touching memorium....  Hugs Martie..
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3 posted 2004-08-29 09:24 PM


May your candle always burn brightly And may his memory stay forever bright in your mind
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4 posted 2004-08-29 10:01 PM


A touching tribute.  Thank you for sharing it again.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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5 posted 2004-08-29 10:09 PM



Your rhyme is so subtle ... works well imaginatively with the "ripples" of remembrance.

Thank you for this.

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6 posted 2004-08-30 08:29 AM


I see his hold still gripped on light
yet I know that it is night

My cousin was kind enough to chauffeur me to a medical procedure last week... and as we were waiting for my name to be called, we both suddenly started talking about his brother and how nothing was right without him... you've said that so beautifully here.

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7 posted 2004-08-30 11:29 AM


Martie - you remember so very well - Paul
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8 posted 2004-08-30 11:34 AM


hugs to you Martie,

magnificent write lady jane

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9 posted 2004-08-30 12:14 PM


light a candle before the dim...

now that never occurred to me! I never even seem to noticed the dimming until the black.

But I getchya Marite!

More aware...and thank you for this, and Robert.

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10 posted 2004-09-01 02:10 AM


light a candle before the dim

tell a feeling when
don’t wait

the gate that swings on whim
when closed will be too late


It is good that this came back for you just now, when you are lighting such candles....you remind yourself better than any of us could have done. May you find peace, love and joy, good lady....in that order.

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11 posted 2005-02-11 08:21 PM


"light a candle before the dim

tell a feeling when
don’t wait

the gate that swings on whim
when closed will be too late"

I can't beleive I hadn't replied to this outstanding write Martie... the words above? speak volumes to me on this day.

hugs and you KNOW that I love you right?

another for my library.

Mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

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