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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-08-26 03:13 AM



~*~

There are whispers in the woods
where temptation haunts and lovers dwell.
Stirring my private heart
moving deep inside the rustling
holding the moment still
longer than I imagined.

Magnifying the silence
a hush alone, quivers quietly
skimming the shallow waters I wade in.
A sort of seeking beyond the proximity of daydreams
relishing in vivid recall,
takes me back to the beginning
when I first held your eyes to mine.

My backbone fixed and knitted,
hard pressed between summer leaves
and moss covered stones,
tucked inside a treasure chest.
But it is the secret cove after the rain falls
where I am most content.
Smooth like satin, draped in chiffon
slipping between clouds of cashmere,
folded up in the beat of your heart.

Like a silver lining that keeps me covered
when my breath becomes a murmur
dancing on the wind that stirs my memories,
leaves me without words to define you.
You are simply the beginning and end of my poems,
just so.

Swaying in the gentle pull that yearns
under the blissful blue ethereal of midnight,
until the river runs and pulls me under,
stepping freely off the edge.

Drowning beneath each sensational ripple
rushing in the warmth of your rapids,
that I know by no other heart,
sending me,
time after time,
and again.

~*~

So sorry for not replying much, but you can be sure I'm reading all the time.  While on my trip to Maine, I got my fingers stuck between the panels of my sisters garage door, guess that's what the handle was for, ya think?  So I'm typing with one hand and the eraser end of a short pencil!  *throb* Gawd, I'm gonna die if I lose my touch.  Trying to blow dry my hair is another story all together.     Anyway, plaster of paris (sp) isn't all it's cracked up to be that's for sure.  Hugs to all you good poets.  

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (08-26-2004 04:38 AM).]

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Magnus
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1 posted 2004-08-26 04:10 AM


Well,  at least it has not slowed down your
muse and her ability to whisper fine words
in your ears.  

Sorry to hear about the hand,  hope you are
well soon....Blow Dryer?  What are those
used for?  I just use a napkin.........

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2004-08-26 04:11 AM


wow bluesy...I hope you feel better

love the write here

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2004-08-26 04:43 AM


Barry~ Thank you very much for your kind words, and most of all for humoring me.  

Hi Dixie~ Thanks for reading, the worst of it is over, it just hurts when I sleep.

You guys are so sweet, thank you again.

miscellanea
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4 posted 2004-08-26 05:14 AM


"slipping between clouds of cashmere," an excellent description, Bluesy.  Enjoyed our poem and got a kick out of your plaster of paris remark.  Right before this I was thinking how uncomfortable I was in my plaster of paris split, and wrote a stupid poem with the many ways people use the word cast.  

Cast your lot
Cast your reel
Cast bronze mold
Cast a play
Cast a shadow
Cast a shadow play?
Downcast
Overcast
Cast in fiber glass
Forecast
Castor Oil
Procast inate?

    Anyway, I'm empathetic--hope your fingers/hand feels better soon.  I haven't been responding much lately either.  It either hurts too much to sit at the computer or I'm too wiped out by the medicine to spell or make sense.
                    miscellanea

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (08-26-2004 12:26 PM).]

Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2004-08-26 07:42 AM


Well one things for darn sure it hasn't affected your writing capabilities. Lori, this is OUTSTANDING.  Hope you feel better soon hon, hugs and peace to you.
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2004-08-26 08:56 AM


toes ms bluezy
type with your toes

I do when I am knitting
that way I can get more done


(hehe)

welcome back lady
with tan tizzy

SEA
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with you
7 posted 2004-08-26 09:02 AM


"Magnifying the silence
a hush alone, quivers quietly
skimming the shallow waters I wade in.
A sort of seeking beyond the proximity of daydreams
relishing in vivid recall,
takes me back to the beginning
when I first held your eyes to mine."


*sigh* this is soooo gorgeous

sorry about your hand....

Martie
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8 posted 2004-08-26 11:13 AM


Lori

What a lovely poem!!

Your hand ...ouch!    

suthern
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9 posted 2004-08-27 03:51 PM


But it is the secret cove after the rain falls
where I am most content.
Smooth like satin, draped in chiffon
slipping between clouds of cashmere,
folded up in the beat of your heart.

Oh, lady... your hand may be throbbing... but your muse is dancing... this is lovely!

I hope you feel better soon!!!

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
10 posted 2004-08-27 03:56 PM


My backbone fixed and knitted,
hard pressed between summer leaves
and moss covered stones,
tucked inside a treasure chest.
But it is the secret cove after the rain falls
where I am most content.
Smooth like satin, draped in chiffon
slipping between clouds of cashmere,
folded up in the beat of your heart.

loved it all, Lori, but of course you knew that

Hope you are healing~~
hugs
M

icebox
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in the shadows
11 posted 2004-08-27 11:46 PM


"Swaying in the gentle pull that yearns
under the blissful blue ethereal of midnight,
until the river runs and pulls me under,
stepping freely off the edge. "

It is this moment of being free that I have loved in your poetry.

Speedy recovery friend.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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12 posted 2004-08-29 01:15 AM


Oh, Bluesy, so sorry to hear about your fingers/hand.  Hope it doesn't hurt too much.  This write of yours definitely sounded like a vivid recall...the imagery was gorgeous.   ....jo
inkedgoddess
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13 posted 2004-08-29 07:44 AM


tucked inside a treasure chest.
But it is the secret cove after the rain falls
where I am most content.
Smooth like satin, draped in chiffon
slipping between clouds of cashmere,
folded up in the beat of your heart.

what a beautiful place to always remember.
and get that healed quick....miss u girlfriend, wondered what was up

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
14 posted 2004-08-29 08:57 AM


Another boost..to tell you I am missing you, still...

hugs
M

Susan
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walking the surreal
15 posted 2004-08-29 09:32 AM


This drapes in gentle folds of softness and beauty - cloaked with your talent.

Best to you -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
16 posted 2004-08-29 06:44 PM


Hey Bluesy . . .

so sorry that you are in pain . . .
hoping all is better . . .
I sure have missed your singing . . .

Tweets

Kristabell
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Portland, OR
17 posted 2004-08-29 07:37 PM


Very wonderfully written.
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