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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2004-08-25 08:53 PM


Amid the urban sprawl
the clutter of these tracts
un-noticed in the rush
this scurrying of ants

awaiting patiently
beyond the concrete shroud
a hint of finery
in contrast to the sound

industrially that spins
its' ever faster wheels
a presence still resides
undaunted by the steel

to soften all that's harsh
blank space is all she needs
an un-developed marsh
not yet consumed by greed

it's there she sounds her call
occasioned by a hush
her spirit kept intact
quite unafraid to blush

"Serenity" she chants,
"can still be found, come see,
I'll show myself to thee."

© Copyright 2004 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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1 posted 2004-08-25 09:08 PM


"it's there she sounds her call
occasioned by a hush
her spirit kept intact
quite unafraid to blush"

I enjoyed this

Temptress
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2 posted 2004-08-25 09:51 PM


can it be found?

You make the concept seem hopeful.

All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill


passing shadows
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3 posted 2004-08-26 04:31 AM


wow...liked this one
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4 posted 2004-08-26 09:48 AM


Doc, I'm liking this one a LOT.
I saw the inner city that hadn't
quite yet
taken over a small, umblemished,
unpolluted pond.

If that is NOT the picture
you were painting, I'm sorry.

But I really do like what I saw.

Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2004-08-26 11:43 AM


Beautiful picture of something that will not be lost.

I enjoyed this very much.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
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6 posted 2004-08-26 11:45 AM


a very enjoyable read...especially the last few lines...serenity is a cherished comodity, or should be.

Wonderfully written

Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2004-08-27 09:32 PM


SEA,
Thanks, I'm glad you picked up on that stanza. I think the focal point was the use of the word "occasioned"( can't even remember the last time I saw that in print).
Doc

Temptress,
Good question, I seem to find alot more of it on paper these days. Thanks.
Doc

passing shadows,
Thanks, glad you liked.
Doc

Dr.Moose1
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8 posted 2004-08-27 09:48 PM


Sunshine,
Thanks, you hit it square on. Overall, I try to focus on the contrast between things. I think it makes the read a little more interesting.
Doc

Susan Caldwell,
Thank you. At least, not lost on some of us.
Doc

LEE J,
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Doc

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