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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2004-08-25 08:17 AM



down by easy
across and behind
taboo circle
there on the corner
with the dark windows

can you hear the music
seeping under the door
how it crawls up your leg
and makes you move nasty
even when you try to ignore

and the watcher's eyes
when you enter
they are so bold
looking at your gifts
like they were for them

everyone there it seems
has one thing in mind
or maybe two or a few
and don't care who knows
or who is close enough

to feel the skin of sin
______________

Dark

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2004-08-25 08:23 AM


can you hear the music
seeping under the door
how it crawls up your leg
and makes you move nasty
even when you try to ignore


outstanding, not to mention, just a tad sensual, a tad...smiles and hugs
good one

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2004-08-25 08:29 AM


ah.. seen such places.. and you captured it well here..

nicely done sir

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-08-25 08:32 AM


Well this whisked me back
to the French Quarters...

muted
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4 posted 2004-08-25 08:33 AM


its gritty
dirty
its part of everyday
and yes, as leeJ said
its kind of sensual too...
but sometimes raw can feel that way

enjoyed this

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2004-08-25 09:04 AM


and makes you move nasty love this image  

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

SEA
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with you
6 posted 2004-08-25 09:13 AM


so then...let's dance....
Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2004-08-25 09:15 AM


down by easy
across and behind
taboo circle
there on the corner
with the dark windows

You have the most awesome way of presenting your images to the reader DS,
and darn, do I LOVE those images.

Wanna Dance?  

sigheyes
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the winds of destiny
8 posted 2004-08-25 09:19 AM


Incredible writing!
Kahlil
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9 posted 2004-08-25 09:21 AM


oh, been there too?
hehe
K

Susan
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walking the surreal
10 posted 2004-08-25 09:23 AM


The seduction of music and the boldness of the flow of the body as it moves to the beat, the rhythm bringing out the primal in us.  A feasting place for the hungry -

Enjoyed-

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Martie
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11 posted 2004-08-25 11:06 AM


DS

If it didn't actually exist...it does now!

Midnitesun
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Gaia
12 posted 2004-08-25 11:14 AM


maybe a healing joint for someone who feels invisible?
as always, you sketch breathing charcoal portraits

passing shadows
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displaced
13 posted 2004-08-25 12:57 PM


Lee stole my verse


Temptress
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14 posted 2004-08-25 10:22 PM


we all are, unfortunately...


enjoyed

All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill


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