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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-08-24 10:05 AM



A Morning's Third Attempt

I wish to squeeze out
all that is inside me
and make room to write
the softness that once was me.

Sometimes I can see it in the mirror
when I lift my eyes and let them
see behind the color.

Other times the hazel turns dark
and only a hint of a tear can cleanse
what they see.

I probably have used up
my allowance of wishes
and all that has happened,
has changed the path I was on.

If there is a better me out there,
I wish it would stop playing hide n seek...
M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-08-24 10:18 AM


M~  I like the you that you see in the mirror, and better?  Nah, me thinks not dear lady.  Super hugs to you, and smiles coming your way.
Startime55
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2 posted 2004-08-24 10:41 AM


Within your words the better you is there for us to see...it is the blinders you wear for protection that stops you from seeing the gentle sweetness all of us see so clearly...you cannot hide forever the beauty of your heart...have patience with yourself for someday when trust of yourself returns so too will the blinders leave and you will see what was always clear to us....**big hugs**

Mon Cherie
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3 posted 2004-08-24 10:45 AM


You are the best! So look no further, just delve into the depths within yourself, and you'll probably find what you're looking for.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

msflame
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4 posted 2004-08-24 11:15 AM


I lift my eyes and let them
see behind the color. "

Your lovely image here made me think of cornflower eyes for some reason and I read much softness in this already.

Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2004-08-24 11:42 AM


"I wish to squeeze out
all that is inside me
and make room to write
the softness that once was me."

(smiling)



passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-08-24 12:21 PM


I know how you feel
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