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Please pity me
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Please pity me |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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From a seed to a tree and I must believe time grows a superior soul but the persona of a mere mortal being held captive in life’s gilded frame prays and entreats and wishes to travel where ere the wind may blow. But when I step out there’s rain on my face and dark are the clouds up above symbolic of how existing conditions restrict and confine my need and desire to advance into true womanhood. And the shadows follow my every deed watching and waiting to see whether growth or a “please pity me” shoots from a base of deficiency out into stormy weather. “Please pity me”, but that’s not for me for today there’s too much to do like packing and moving and rearranging my dreams and perceptions into the farce of my reality. And the wind blows only my soul over the tumultuous sea! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching |
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msflame Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 188 |
I could never pity anyone who can write expression from deep within! Very moving. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
into the farce of my reality. I have days like that... too many hugs M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Helen I enjoyed this very much, and within the words I see an abundance of hope.... ------------------------------------------ And the wind blows only my soul over the tumultuous sea! ----------------------------------------- Wonderful line! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is excellent. Very moving.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I remember many days when I have felt like that....You have expressed it perfectly...a wonderful poem about heartfelt reality... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helen "symbolic of how existing conditions restrict and confine my need and desire to advance into true womanhood" Although I have never seen you, I know, you ARE a beautiful and true woman!  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you all so very much for reading and commenting. And Martie, thank you. Perhaps I'll send you a pic of the ... old woman who doesn't yet sit in a wicker chair by the sea. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...deeply moving! Eric |
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