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Anticipating Autumn

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Martie
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Anticipating Autumn  

A hawk called in fly by across the blue
and suddenly the sun closed down
with a dog barking the neighborhood gate
sounding alarm    too soon not too late

All my skin was wind wise
and in the place of feathers and questions
I draped my sheer portent     determined to close only clouds
and ease into something that I dont know yet

But I feel it coming like a slow train
beating out a rhythm
calling to my lack of rain
with fresh fill of some song it is bursting
and I can almost sing along

Then like some sweet minute never meant to end
its gone and I am all alone again


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Then like some sweet minute never meant to end
its gone and I am all alone again


Martie... despite how you might feel alone.. you are never alone...
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Only you could make me anticipate
something more...

as you well know.

You never seem alone,
you know,
when you wrap your words
so well around you.
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"But I feel it coming like a slow train
beating out a rhythm
calling to my lack of rain
with fresh fill of some song it is bursting
and I can almost sing along"

Autumn is my favorite season, just wish it wasn't followed by winter...  
Enjoyed much Martie.


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Martie - you say and I stand in awe -you give me eyes  that see things I never imagined - this is great - paul
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"But I feel it coming like a slow train
beating out a rhythm
calling to my lack of rain
with fresh fill of some song it is bursting
and I can almost sing along

Then like some sweet minute never meant to end
its gone and I am all alone again"

Oh, but, Martie, you are such a sweet musician and you are singing that moment here so well!  Loved this.   ....jo


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So beautifully said....but we must remember that here in this paradise, we can choose to have seasons, or not. It's all up to us.

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sigh
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Applause and a

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

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Oh, Martie - this is simply lovely!  We're never alone - we simply think we are - and the sweet moments will live forever.
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Your words give inspiration to aspire to a higher level of writing, that which for you is an inherent part of who you are. So my eye can only look in admiration, and my heart in joy.

take care, sweet poetess
Liz
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You've really become an expert at this stuff Martie....incredible write....
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All my skin was wind wise
and in the place of feathers and questions
I draped my sheer portent     determined to close only clouds
and ease into something that I dont know yet

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good lordy I LOVE your personifications and imagery...time and time again you turn words into poetic perfection.

We go where there is love when ever we are lonely ... going back, we find,
enough love stayed behind to make us feel at home.

Jane Oliver

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This is simply amazing Martie, as is you.

Sweet Lady

I'm keeping it

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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Geez how did I miss this? So glad it came back up. Martie, hon...you alone? Never gal, NEVER  
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something about this one
sends a note of winter too

your eyes see something hidden
don't be afraid

enjoyed your are as always ms martie
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Hiya Martie and good morning

You are a tremendous writer, able to keep the reader in suspense from beginning to end, with a story lesson...and I never tire of reading you....it's always such a thrilling experience to click on you.

No, you are never alone...ever...and you have my number if need be.

Take care dear friend, and sending good thoughts your way, for you and yours.
Luv
Me
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Martie .... This touched my love of trains, and rainy weather ..... and " ... sweet minutes never meant to end." Well done. Bob
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18 posted 08-26-2004 02:45 PM       View Profile for choshi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for choshi

The movements and images here are quite powerful - and moving - like autumn's changes

~P
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Even your title is pure poetry. *S* I read this... and read it again... from soar to sad settle... this is excellent!!
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This read like a soft breeze. Lovely. I do thank you!
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~oh just, reading and sighing and feeling small slivers of it myself these past days, like quiet whispers walking past. your writing is alive, something powerful enough to soak skin and heart.
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I had to read and re-read this ... beautiful, the way you make us feel anticipation and then the closing and abandonment of winter.  It doesn't trip lightly ... perfect for autumn, though.  
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All my skin was wind wise
and in the place of feathers and questions

Good grief~you awe me lady.
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You do have a way with words...
always a pleasure to read and experience.
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