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Poetry of Lesser Degree |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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Please speak to me a naked language in sacred tongue. Let me find reprieve upon your breath through parted lips; a prayer of touch soul to skin to exist as more than lustful whim. And when my heart bleeds beyond your need, I'll gently wait in whispered sin. Endure the want and pretend that you still sing for me even if only poetry of lesser degree. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is beautiful but don't settle for less you deserve the best |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I guess you get older and wiser is true, because I sure know one thing - I wait for no one anymore  Nicely worded and enjoyed this so much. As a matter of fact I am sending your poem to a friend in Australia to read. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Dixie dear....thank you for reading and being soooooo supportive  Mysteria: long road ahead of me..before i even graces the very edges of wisdom  sooo much to learn ......and thank you for thinking enough of this poem to share it with a friend [This message has been edited by muted (08-23-2004 07:01 AM).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
To be sung a poem is a beautiful thing! Wonderful poem, though sad.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Such a beautiful poem Dawn, even in it's sadness. Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Sad poems?..dark poems?..what does that realy mean? Goldenrose. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
muted, this is wonderful, expression of the greatest degree, touched me to the soul. Sincerely Rick |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
martie: thank you, soooo nice to have you read...and i cant wait till the day, somebody sings a poem to me Maree:  you still a sweetypiecuddlebuttGoldenrose: maybe the sad, and the dark, are all just a part of where i feel incomplete thank you for reading Rick: thank you so much for that incredible reply. that has put a huge smile on my face. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Please speak to me a naked language in sacred tongue. Let me find reprieve upon your breath through parted lips; a prayer of touch soul to skin to exist as more than lustful whim. =========================== oh man....ya had me from the title on... what a very very cool poem... Please speak to me a naked language in sacred tongue. OH HOW I WISH I HAD WROTE THAT!! and yes...that title is pure poetry... this whole write is!! A bittersweet beauty poetess Dawn... and...a keeper. We go where there is love when ever we are lonely ... going back, we find, |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
you have crossed a threshold here now the morning waits for you to close the door behind you perfect edges ms |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Beautiful |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Such wonderful poetry! Very, very nice write! JL |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
this is not poetry to a lesser degree... but indeed to a higher one.. yeah, this one got to me... |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
I loved this one buddy, and had to say this... Because ya ma buddy Unwavering friendship is yours My task today is to Place you on top of the list. It's not the blindfold that blinds you, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
There is a richness to your words, Dawn, that I have always enjoyed. hugs M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Dawn dear, one thing that I have learned is that wether or not your poetry is happy, sad, reflective or mad.... it is always written with perfection, and from your heart. Lesser degree? NAH NEVER!! HUGS |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
JM: you wowed me with your response, thank you so much for enjoying my poem! Dark: im left smiling at you LeeJ: thank you JL: thank you for enjoying Cpat: you know, i think thats the best thing you have ever said to me that "yeah, this one got to me"...Thank you Moves: hi buddy, thank you...ya know all already ~M~: so glad to see you here today, thank you so much. Donna: you flatter me, and you always bring a smile to my face...thank you! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Your day will come and when it does you will get what you deserve which is the best there is to offer not less...The magic of love can strike when lease expected... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Startime: you are ~right~...soooo very right, thank you for you sweet wisdom |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is so utterly beautiful. I don't know how to say anything about it, but I love it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
this, dear poet, is a write of a higher degree and another keeper for me |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I read this a few moments after you posted this, Dawn, and it applied your username to my thoughts, muting them, and I found it very hard to know how to respond, so I sat back, and watched as others came in with their responses. I think DS said it best - you crossed a threshold. Brava! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I've come back to this one sevral times and read again and again.. each time the words of my own almost forming an image and a mood to reflect what it makes me see and feel.. almost... maybe almost is all there is... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Mmm hmm...Almost But this little write seem most complete. Well done Dawnunder! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Not sure which I'd rather...to have written this or had it written for me. Excellent write Dawn. Dark and brief can be a perfect combination.  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Pilgrimage: thank you for what you have said Midnitesun: thank you so much, and for it to be a keeper? so lovely of you Sunshine: crossing a threshold....then its about time isnt it? thank youCpat: *hugging you* Wranx: thank you but you know...so far yet to go Ducan: im glad you came and read...nice to see you here..and you know..wish i was the one this was written for LOL |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I have no way to tell you how much I LOVE this!!! Good grief....pure poetic perfection...I am soooo keeping this one |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
hugs back ma'am... rarely do I read apiece that haunts me like this one has..I continue to open it and read..perhaps aline or two, before I have to avert my eyes and close it... only to come back..and try again to absorb I thank you for this one... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
SEA: thank you for your generous reply!! and Ron, means so much to me...really does... thank you for thanking me and for not only knowing but touching the depths |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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