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iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

0 posted 2004-08-21 02:21 AM

My muse spilled this........don't know why.

Wrap me in your blanket, darling,
Rock me in your arms.
I am in a weakened way
And captivated by your charm.

Hold my hands and kiss them clean.
Walk me through the crystal stream;
Bathe me in your silver dream.
Your magic hushes all my screams.

Wipe my tears and stroke my brow.
Place a smile in me.
Hold me ‘til the night is done;
Then you can set me free.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-08-21 03:08 AM

sort of sad but beautiful too

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2004-08-21 08:35 AM

Sweet melancholy...this.
Not quite bittersweet, but
tinging the border...

a

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

3 posted 2004-08-21 03:38 PM

well-captured one night stand.
very well done.

it's not that the future is near or far...
the future's just so grim.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2004-08-21 04:40 PM

Jo~
Oh gosh ... please :hug: your muse for me~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Verve
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

5 posted 2004-08-21 04:40 PM

reminds me of a song... i liked it.. very lyrical...

"Who knows what evil lurks in the heart of Man?"

ctowen
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since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

6 posted 2004-08-21 07:41 PM

feels like a hug from a bright evening moon ....

thats always a place to be to me!

Beautifully felt!

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

7 posted 2004-08-26 02:44 AM

Good muse, I'd say!
I definitely agree that this is lyrical... it sings off the page with a longing but lovely ache. I started to reply on this before but had to go so I hadta come back and read you again

love it!

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

8 posted 2004-08-26 10:49 AM

Yes, at least for tonight. Lovely, jo.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

choshi
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since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

9 posted 2004-08-26 11:08 AM

Wrap me in your blanket, darling,
Rock me in your arms.
I am in a weakened way
And captivated by your charm.

Hold my hands and kiss them clean.
Walk me through the crystal stream;
Bathe me in your silver dream.
Your magic hushes all my screams.

Wipe my tears and stroke my brow.
Place a smile in me.
Hold me ‘til the night is done;
Then you can set me free.

Simply beautiful, poignant, erotic, powerful... evoking so many feelings, images, fantasies. Dear ~Jo, don't ask "why....the Mse spills out"

A moment's respite
before silver dreams fade
in dawn's first light,
my tears remain hidden
in mists above crystal streams.

~P

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

10 posted 2004-08-26 02:37 PM

Very sensual.

Eric

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2004-08-26 07:44 PM

Felt like this many times...many times...James

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

12 posted 2004-08-26 07:48 PM

you sing beautifully as a golden sparrow

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

13 posted 2004-08-26 08:22 PM

No matter why I am glad your muse spilled this one..

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

14 posted 2004-08-27 03:18 PM

Jo,
  This is a real keeper.  Perhaps your muse visited Ohio for a moment...  Those wishes.
"If wishes were horses beggars would ride,"Grandma would say.
                       luv ya,
                      miscellanea

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2004-08-29 04:37 AM

Back again...James

Kristabell
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since 2003-11-29

Posts 678
Portland, OR

16 posted 2004-08-29 05:58 AM

Ah, I know the feeling. You wrote it out well.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

17 posted 2004-09-05 03:04 AM

A beautiful flow of poetry...James

~K~
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since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

18 posted 2004-09-05 03:19 AM

perhaps your muse
got wind of
exactly what I
wanted to hear

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

19 posted 2004-09-05 09:47 AM

Very Nice----- :0
Although I can see by the last line that you are not ready to fully commit...
enjoyed
--------ice
><>

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

20 posted 2004-09-05 11:09 AM

iliana,
Yup, you're good! I really like this a lot.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

MyHeartofShadows
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 88
Hyattsville, MD

21 posted 2004-09-05 09:25 PM

Images of a lovely dream
Dream some more poetry, please

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

22 posted 2004-09-05 09:54 PM

This is just so beautiful...and so lovely wow Jo~ one of the bet I've read! heart hugssss too in understanding...

I don’t want the world to see me
cause I don’t think that they’d understand
When everything’s made to be broken I just want you to know who I am

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

23 posted 2004-09-05 10:14 PM

Hi Jo: this is truly an amazing piece that I've read several times. Each time I feel more emotion flowing from it.

Great writing! hugs, Marti

Look deep, deep into nature,
and then you will understand
everything better.
Albert Einstein

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

24 posted 2004-09-06 10:17 PM

iliana, this poem reminds me of one that I wrote several years ago entitled, "Just for Tonight". I never posted it, but I literally got goosebumps reading your lyrically lilting poem. Your muse has not abandoned you! It was good to read your lovely collaboration!

Love ya, lily jo!
Linda

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

25 posted 2004-09-07 12:25 PM

Hi iliana. Mmm...love this piece. Love the ryhme scheme a-heck-of-a-lot! Bravo! It is a sad piece but deeply beautiful too. I could never write this way. I always end up twisting my poetry into convuluted pieces that are never what I first imagined. Bravo my friend!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

E S West
Member

since 2004-08-31

Posts 116
California

26 posted 2004-09-07 05:05 PM

Enjoyed this very much

E S West

"always be true to SELF, and follow your heart.."
" Ignorance is the root of all evil "

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

27 posted 2004-09-07 08:27 PM

Set you free? Perhaps... But, on the
other hand...why? After all, one can
never get enough of something so nice
as a poetess who writes so nicely!!!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

28 posted 2004-09-08 01:53 PM

But after such a night... I'd just want another... and another... *S*

I liked this very much! *S*

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

29 posted 2004-09-23 10:21 PM

Jo,
And do it all over again, right? Wonderful write.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

30 posted 2004-09-25 06:26 AM

Hello iliana. This is a great poem. OH yes it is. Loved it!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

31 posted 2004-09-25 08:29 AM

Not long ago, I felt one of your poems was difficult to write. I think this one just blossomed in you with a need to get out. Well done. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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