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Open Poetry #33

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Adonis Cross
Junior Member

since 2003-04-07

Posts 46
Miami, FL, USA

0 posted 2004-08-20 07:42 PM

I haven't gone to see your stone, and kneel
Beside the mound that interrputs the lawn;
My worried friends have told me why they feel
I haven't gone.

They bring me flowers I can lay upon
Your grave, and offer words to help me heal,
To make me unafraid of moving on.

I never try to tell them of our deal,
Of how you said, "I'll greet you every dawn,
In spirit, with a whisper to reveal
I haven't gone."

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

1 posted 2004-08-20 11:02 PM

it takes a lot to make me comment, i admit that. you've managed to make me click that reply button.

not only is this just simply stunning poetry but that closing....actually gave me a lump in my throat.

wonderful. i'll be looking forward to more from you.

snow

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
--Mother Teresa

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

2 posted 2004-08-20 11:19 PM

"I'll greet you every dawn,
In spirit, with a whisper to reveal
I haven't gone."

This, the real immortality.

-glider-

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-08-21 12:52 PM

not sure what to say

this aches but gave me a warm feeling too...wow

bittersweet

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

4 posted 2004-08-21 01:34 PM

outstanding write
K

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