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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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0 posted 2004-08-20 11:22 AM

These the few days of last
have been grey in their sky
dropping sparse rain from clouds
that refuse to cry
yet show bruises against the blue
and turn a shoulder cool
to the heat of this the month of August

and I seek something warm
to remind me I am alive
and wrap warm around this skin

Your eyes reflected the ripples of lake
       and grey waters turned slightly blue
while you watched in an absent way
the change of wind on wave
the dance of small crests on stone

I wondered how my hands would fit your curves
as I watched stray strand of sun
shine through the dress you wore
               and how the taste of you would sit
on my tongue
                     if I sampled the sea of you

Your face remained still
                                   as I hurriedly drew words in my mind
to hold the image of you there
and to draw from later
                                when I would imagine you beside the bed
letting soft cotton fall
to reveal what here in this the cold of Summer
                     you hid

I am drawn to the twist of hair now lit in fading sun
And ponder what it means
When August fails to share her warmth
             And Spring tempests still form from clotted sky

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

1 posted 2004-08-20 11:26 AM

"and I seek something warm
to remind me I am alive
and wrap warm around this skin"

oh this is incredible.
i read it in my mind with the gentlest of voices...and then read it again.

it tickles the page, it wraps and caresses the tongue.....

you have to stop outdoing yourself...i can
taste your poetry!

wonderful

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2004-08-20 11:27 AM

Ma'am.. you are far too generous.. but I thank you for the nice words.. and the nice thoughts...

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2004-08-20 11:33 AM

I just occurred to me what your words are....foreplay.

Always a sensual play on skin...a caress of words.

and I always welcome it.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2004-08-20 11:40 AM

Ah Ms Susan... they are just words from an old fool.. but if you enjoy them.. then I am pleased.. and thank you for saying so.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2004-08-20 11:45 AM

OK, so spatter made me sputter, again.
*sigh* Now, how am I supposed to get anything done 'round here? LOL

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

6 posted 2004-08-20 11:53 AM

(chuckling)... s'patter.....

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2004-08-20 12:14 PM

Well old fool - you awake the senses with these writes I tell you in here yet, another old fool. Smooth as something very cliche (pick a word here,) for sure

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

8 posted 2004-08-20 12:14 PM

Wow...I haven't even had a whole cup of coffee yet and this is still great. Just think how good it'll be when I wake up. Hiya bud...

passing shadows
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displaced

9 posted 2004-08-20 12:49 PM

damn

Martie

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10 posted 2004-08-20 02:32 PM

So many beautiful images in this, Ron...my personal favorite is "clotted sky".

jellybeans
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Posts 2298

11 posted 2004-08-20 02:47 PM

the images, oh the images, if only I could write as this........no one writes poetry, quite like you...enjoyed much

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

12 posted 2004-08-20 02:48 PM

ah.. thank you all... much kinder words than deserved for such scribblings.. but your generous replies..are greatly appreciated

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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13 posted 2004-08-20 06:13 PM

BIG SIGH, what Dawn and Susan said.

tasty!

foreplay!

indeed

Maree.

it's a

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

14 posted 2004-08-20 06:51 PM

It doesn't get much better than this.

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

15 posted 2004-08-21 01:15 AM

you remain one of pip's elite writers. simply fantastic

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

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standing on a shadow's lace

16 posted 2004-08-21 02:09 AM

nice

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

17 posted 2004-08-21 04:50 AM

We must have been listening to each others' muses tonight...or maybe it is just the time of year. Lovely wistful writing; much enjoyed.........jo

ice
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since 2003-05-17

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18 posted 2004-08-21 08:36 AM

Cpat
This poem is beautiful, I can relate to its realness...
Bravo! I applaud the depth of it...
Thank you for sharing.
--------ice
><>

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

19 posted 2004-08-21 04:24 PM

Hey Ron,

you know, an angel's wings first came to mind when I read to about the third stanza about being warm . . . and then the twisted hair . . . goodness that made me sad -->>
seeing the last of the days of summer -->>
the last of many things . . . this is beautifully saddening . . . like Mozarts, "Ave Maria."

I have missed your words . . .

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