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Kaoru
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0 posted 2004-08-20 12:37 PM



If I told you I were humble,
you would cackle..destroying the silence around us.
I could do the same to you, and you would be just
as disturbed by my tongue - forcefully - intruding
your thoughts.

It is disgusting how you licked clean my
sane thoughts, but it was the only way to inquire
as to the truths that surround this square of space
that we are confined to.

It was at this time that I realized that you
are not so wise as I'd imagined.
Your words were short, and your temper as well,
perhaps it was the darkness that made
things protrude in a different manner.

My imagination has been swayed, but still, you laugh.

Courage is not something that can be forced upon me,
and you yourself have said, many times, that
faith is disillusion.
I think
it's more of a diversion, or a scrape of
hallucinogenic time. As if I were one to know the
incredible strength of the stories..

I am always sad to see you go,
like a whisper that I heard while halfway concious.
Similar to déjà vu, or songs that never existed.

I will always recall the musk you reeked of, and
the prying tongue. Your imperfection says enough,
but your laughter overflows with insanity and
intellect.

© Copyright 2004 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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1 posted 2004-08-20 12:39 PM


Nice...James
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2 posted 2004-08-20 01:07 AM


you described mine as well
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3 posted 2004-08-20 01:10 AM


some men are better left
alone
in the dark

and yet?

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2004-08-20 06:56 AM


wow.

(and wince--tell me his name isn't Roger? I guess we all have one of these sooner or later, but lord, woman, this is so him)

wow.

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5 posted 2004-08-20 07:38 AM



I will always recall the musk you reeked of, and
the prying tongue. Your imperfection says enough,
but your laughter overflows with insanity and
intellect.

i have one that haunts me like this, who i just loved dancing with, tho he stepped on my toes a few times too many; he rings through
loud and clear in your portrayal here

LeeJ
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6 posted 2004-08-20 08:02 AM


Hello and Good Morning...this one was profound and aching to read...I'd forgotten how very intense your poems are...and why I've missed you...you remind how fragile a heart can be, and what not to do to someone else.  

Huglets of many sent your way...wishing you a great Friday and weekend ahead.

Luv Lee J.

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7 posted 2004-08-20 08:07 AM


Powerful write
enjoyed.

Gloom

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8 posted 2004-08-22 10:18 AM


I love the way you capture the atmosphere, and make it an extension of the personalities...that takes a careful touch.

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9 posted 2004-08-22 10:24 AM


but your laughter overflows with insanity and
intellect.

Wow...certainly this would be a most interesting
person to converse with.  

Loved the write,  such depth of thought.

Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2004-09-07 12:37 PM


"It is disgusting how you licked clean my
sane thoughts"

"It was at this time that I realized that you
are not so wise as I'd imagined."

goodness....I know him!!!!!!

  How you doin' Meg?  Almost baby time for you!!!  Make sure you keep me or Leah up to date!!  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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11 posted 2004-09-07 01:34 PM


Courage is not something that can be forced upon me,
and you yourself have said, many times, that
faith is disillusion.
I think
it's more of a diversion, or a scrape of
hallucinogenic time. As if I were one to know the
incredible strength of the stories..
no courage is not forced upon us...it is inside us...

nice to read you..as always..I'm impressed

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2004-09-07 01:54 PM


Yep, we all have one of those, or have had.  Very well done gal.
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