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Where are we all going????
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Where are we all going???? |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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In figure 8's blackbirds fly over laundry lines; fisherman's face etched with life full of sun, tattered pole topples another fish story swimming by; red white and blues, hang overhead in brickface rows, checkered dog dances the length of his shadow, too many cars honking with hysteria, little girls say 'moo' old colored lights hang from evergreens, lining sidewalks, caught between christmases, fumes and songbirds breathe with sky, little boys stepping on ants, laughing with glee, somebody teach them please............. roadside flowers pretty colors stuck between cracks, succumb to the season, wilt on their deathbed, we all must die; life becomes a traffic jam massive and poignant pointless and maddening thursday afternoon TICK TOCK TICK TOCK where are we all going? leaving brooklyn fuggedaboudit................................... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"somebody teach them please............." yes, and though this write has a sad sound to it, I think you spend more time looking at refreshing rainbows |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I really appreciate the way you describe the world around you. It takes me to another place, even the woods get mundane. Thank you for another perspective. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yep...as my boy Lenny Kravitz begs an answer, "Where are we runnin'?" It's great to read you again, lady, you've got a style that bridges gaps.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh, this is good |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Inky Strong thought here.... An entire poem could be molded aroud this, used as a theme... "little boys stepping on ants, laughing with glee, somebody teach them please..." If they are not chastised, they will think it ok that if you wear the right uniform it is ok to pick up a gun and shoot at people you don't even know... Sorry to have turned this political, I just couldn't help it..these words openened a window in my mind.... Enjoyed the whole poem.... --------ice ><> "Come, read to me some poem, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks guys and gals ice: quite alright, glad that it evoked that...cause yes, stretching it a bit further , as with toy guns, why must we even put that in a boy's hand? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"roadside flowers pretty colors stuck between cracks, succumb to the season, wilt on their deathbed, we all must die;" ~ You always manage to elicit strong emotions in me with your vividly descriptive poetry and unique perspectives on the world around you. Your eyes are windows to places that I have seen, but I see them anew through yours. Warm hug, Linda  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Loved the way you wrote this....whatta picture!!..and nobody can reply better than Earth Angel..... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Heehee! Wonderful write. Enjoyed!! JL |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michele, I have missed seeing through your words. You can describe so vividly what your mind's eye sees. Hugs, Ethel |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hi, Michelle -- so many imagines evoking memories from now and from then. You started me swirling with the figure eights!  ....jo |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
And even the best flyers will land. -glider- |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
yep it was this that struck a chord in me as well Michele . . . little boys stepping on ants, laughing with glee, somebody teach them please............. they must be taught, oh yes . . . miss you Lady . . . |
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