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0 posted 2004-08-19 05:06 PM


In the final dance of sun
That now sets earlier with each passing day
a portend of longer times spent
Huddled against a migrating wind
Some fragments of light remain
That break off the waves set below us
Into splintered bits that illuminate
Just part of you
         Once to shine on arm
Then again cross your thigh
But you are impervious to their charm
And sit staring out beyond the shore
Pondering no doubt
Weighty matters that are too heavy to float
On this evenings light breeze
Or to be set aside and picked up again

Some other time


I imagine how I’d sketch you clad in sky
   Of how the turn of curve would lead me to draw
Longer lines along your back
And of how the light might be played across your face
Half shadowed
                            More thoughtful perhaps than tender
Yet still enticing in the way as woman you display
Beauty of softer form
                    
But the light is fading
And I do not find a pencil to fit my hands
   Only words to remember
And dreams of nights this warm
And of sand
                           And of then

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1 posted 2004-08-19 05:17 PM


I imagine how I’d sketch you clad in sky
Of how the turn of curve would lead me to draw
Longer lines along your back
And of how the light might be played across your face
Half shadowed
More thoughtful perhaps than tender
Yet still enticing in the way as woman you display
Beauty of softer form


despite the ending, Ron I loved this view of your words..helped make my day nicer~~

M ( and thanks for the hug)

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2 posted 2004-08-19 05:28 PM


Ms M.  the hug.. my pleasure...

your words.. greatly appreciated... I am glad if the small scribblings brighten your day..

now.. stand over there against the window and half turn away... I'll see if I can sketch you in words..

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3 posted 2004-08-19 05:29 PM


you already know...

I wish I could type silence.

I might be a poet then.

*touching the screen*

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4 posted 2004-08-19 05:41 PM


"I imagine how I’d sketch you clad in sky"
*sigh* that's how I'd want someone to sketch me

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5 posted 2004-08-19 05:43 PM


Ser....
ya know I thank you for the read.. and for the words...

sometimes silence is not all it's cracked up to be ya know..


hugs my friend

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6 posted 2004-08-19 05:46 PM


thank you
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7 posted 2004-08-19 05:46 PM


ah Ms K...
           thank you ma'am.. for the read.. and the nice words..


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8 posted 2004-08-19 05:48 PM


Ms M...

  Since I don't draw... perhaps some time words will have to do

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-19-2004 06:52 PM).]

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9 posted 2004-08-19 05:54 PM


OMG, I'm keeping this thread now. Er, back to work? But why???? OK, we'll catch you later.
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10 posted 2004-08-19 06:07 PM


LOL.. Ms K.. you'd better save more than the thread..lol.. I'll be back to change the replies..to thank yous ..and the words will dissapear...


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11 posted 2004-08-19 06:11 PM


one for everybody, Cap!

c'mon...

he's so purty...*battin' eyelashes*

come to think of it?

Maureen, Kacy? perhaps we should lock the thread!

*laughing*

(and trust me, Cap, I've learned. It's saved here too.)

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12 posted 2004-08-19 06:14 PM


you sly devil you
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13 posted 2004-08-19 06:21 PM


Kacy? I keep a folder just for him, just because of this business.

I've suggested many times that his editing privelages be revoked...and if I were queen of the forest? It'd be done!


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14 posted 2004-08-19 06:26 PM


(chuckling).. scribblings... and me just taking up space... hardly worth the save ladies....



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15 posted 2004-08-19 06:28 PM


LOL, good idea Ser, as I've learned to save his stuff. LOL I'm thinking of calling him POOF, the magic word dragon, who lives in the sea of poetry, and frolics in the mist with words for you and me...
LOL, do ya think he might read this before I can wave my magic wand and make it disappear?

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16 posted 2004-08-19 06:29 PM


I keep telling you
but you won't listen...
so I'll just absorb...

and be happy.


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17 posted 2004-08-19 06:31 PM


and now he's just keeping us busy Kacy, and laughing his hinie off too, I'll bet!

that rogue!


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18 posted 2004-08-19 06:34 PM


a half smile played along the edge of lips
and she felt the blush of cheek
     Too OLD she thought
and shook her head

       Yet he knew...

the words would capture not enough
and paper could not hold the things inside
~*~
and this?

You can't delete...

and if pushed, I can lock threads, too!

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19 posted 2004-08-19 06:34 PM


LOL, he really is pushing all the buttons now
and admit it, you love it!

Karilea? I already kept a separate copy on my PC, so unless he hacks it...

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20 posted 2004-08-19 06:35 PM


ah... POOF huh?  (chuckling)... don't wave that wand at me..it might be loaded...lol..

Ms Sunshine... thank you ma'am


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21 posted 2004-08-19 06:38 PM


nope
(did you catch that last one?)
ROTFLMAO

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22 posted 2004-08-19 06:40 PM


  it's a harmless "threat"...LOL....

but we DO need to rename him!


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23 posted 2004-08-19 06:42 PM


when I first saw his pen name, I said outloud
"spatter"  LOL, the poor guy!

hey, did we just hijack this thread?

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24 posted 2004-08-19 06:44 PM


splatter?/// ugh... now Kacy..I think I shall have to resign as Cpat Hair.. until I can find another name...

LMAO

you ladies are too much...

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25 posted 2004-08-19 06:45 PM


was that for me..."blushing"

I copied it and saved it...because yes, RT
you made my day... besides you may  delete it all


M

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26 posted 2004-08-19 06:54 PM


Ah.. Ms M.. glad it made you smile...
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27 posted 2004-08-19 06:57 PM


delightfully naughty, ain't he?

and now I'm going to be late...save save save save save...



"bad boy!"


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28 posted 2004-08-19 07:18 PM


Yes ma'am.. I have been scolded..so I'll be good now.. and not be bothering no one...



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29 posted 2004-08-19 08:53 PM


WHAT?

You leave, just as I come in?

No way, Jose.

Bother us some more.


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30 posted 2004-08-19 09:41 PM


The beauty of the vision you create is as warm and gentle as sands beneath bare feet...A wonderful read...

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31 posted 2004-08-19 09:57 PM


Somehow I feel you just barely scratched the surface and I only wish you had with you a pen   Absolutely the softest, romantic picture painted in my mind today.  
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32 posted 2004-08-19 10:05 PM


Sir Ron

You touch as always, something special.  

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33 posted 2004-08-20 12:22 PM


Incredible writing, Cpat.
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34 posted 2004-08-20 08:37 AM


ah thank you all... you are far too kind...

  

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35 posted 2004-08-20 09:04 AM


In the final dance of sun
That now sets earlier with each passing day
a portend of longer times spent
Huddled against a migrating wind
Some fragments of light remain
That break off the waves set below us
Into splintered bits that illuminate
Just part of you
         Once to shine on arm
Then again cross your thigh
But you are impervious to their charm
And sit staring out beyond the shore
Pondering no doubt
Weighty matters that are too heavy to float
On this evenings light breeze
Or to be set aside and picked up again
=============================


Dont EVER stop writing...
type it...pen it...prick your finger, lipstick on a mirror, write on napkins, matchbooks...scratch it on the wall, write on bathroom stalls, chalk on a sidewalk...

JUST DONT STOP.........


but PUHLEEEEEEEZE STOP deleting and editing ....

sheeesh.... I saw them..got a phone call...came back and they were gone...


grrrrr.....

ya know...you aint THAT far away from me...
dont make a moth walk there on her lips to kick yer poetic butt... LOL

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36 posted 2004-08-20 09:04 AM



This whole thread
is a keeper...

and you, sir, continue to amaze.

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37 posted 2004-08-20 09:12 AM


Weighty matters that are too heavy to float
On this evenings light breeze
Or to be set aside and picked up again


yes indeedy, you've got the right idea...wishing you and she a bunch of happy days, this gives warmth to the heart and a smile to the mind...very very beautiful write...or is it warmth to the mind and a smile to the heart?  Well, I vote both...hehhehehe

A very exquisite write

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38 posted 2004-08-20 09:13 AM


Jan? "You've got mail."



*smirk*


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39 posted 2004-08-20 09:19 AM


some fine lines Cpat
no flatterspeak intended
muy fine lines

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40 posted 2004-08-20 09:31 AM


You write with such vivid imagery I can see the scene played out right before my very eyes. Outstanding
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41 posted 2004-08-20 09:33 AM


I am always a late arrival...*sigh*

But Ron, I feel as if I have lived this.  

Those words melt on my skin.  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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42 posted 2004-08-20 11:56 AM


thank you all.. the nice words..and knowing that you read, maybe found something to enjoy in it..is a pleasure...


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43 posted 2004-08-20 01:36 PM


just awesome!
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44 posted 2004-08-22 10:25 AM


This comes from a beautiful place, and goes to a beautiful place. If I had the talent, I would write it just so -- and I wish I had.

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