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Aries' Eyes
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Aries' Eyes |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I'll steal lifetimes beyond my share to watch dawn rise in Aries’ eyes Knowing nirvana awaits me there I'll steal lifetimes beyond my share to patiently sing this unheard prayer a silent voice your heart denies I'll steal lifetimes beyond my share to watch dawn rise in Aries’ eyes. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I agree...beautiful and melodious |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Dawn, your heart songs are so very lovely... this is poignantly beautiful! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Very well done!!! and love the new pic! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is lovely Dawn. Enjoyed. Chris  "At one glance |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
beautiful theft |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
hmmmmmm.... sometimes lifetimes are found in the small seconds we see ourselves reflected in someone else's eyes... and we find out the reflection is not what we thought we were, but something more. nicely done ma'am |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I echo all that Cpat said. it's a keeper. Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile... I'd like to watch you watch, but then, I'm a little kinky.  Beautiful work here, and more beauty left to be discovered methinks. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Muted This is a real smoothy.... Sensual, hopeful, lovely enjoyed the repetition... -------ice ><> |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
nice eyes!! and the poem too held a captivating glance enjoyed it ms |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Please take this the right way, as I am a real sucker for nice cards, and I can sure see this inside one. Just beautiful and I wish I would have thought of this concent myself |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dawn The feel of this is so very lovely! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
A mystical, hauntingly lovely triolet. I love this one. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Ishmael Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 51 |
A beautiful poem! ...I find forms rather confining, But thats because I'm not clever or patient enough to jam my round self into a square hole. So this impresses me greatly. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Absolutely beautiful Dawn, not sentimental drivel at all. smacks you upside head |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 You, dear muted, are a terrific writer. This evokes so much emotion.  ....jo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your muse is smiling.... and so am I! |
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