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Soleil Noir
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0 posted 2004-08-18 10:56 AM



Here, There

It doesn’t really matter
what day         time comes
or when night             falls to shadows

you are there, here with me

shudders escaping
again
in silent sighs

this brain refusing to rest,
racing in its reach onward to

what day          time comes

when you will be here, there with me

and no amount of light
when that day         our time comes
will see us
as other than one.

I am
your promise.


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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-08-18 10:58 AM


It is good to see you posting again,
and this..

I am
your promise.


is the perfect ending to this wonderful write!  Very well done.



Snow
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2 posted 2004-08-18 11:12 AM


this...
is perfect, in words and presentation.
brava!


snow

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
--Mother Teresa

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-08-18 11:15 AM


I am
your promise.


whoooo hoooo, Outstanding, the entire poem, but these last two lines...whewwww what a way to ROCK, surely packs a whollop!
Very much enjoyed


muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
4 posted 2004-08-18 11:38 AM


lovely, flowing.
much enjoyed

Pell
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5 posted 2004-08-18 11:44 AM


and no amount of light
when that day         our time comes
will see us
as other than one.

I am
your promise.

Oh Yeah, I second that emotion. This is fantastic!

Nightshade
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just out of reach
6 posted 2004-08-18 12:09 PM


Exquisite !!

Hugs, Chrislane

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2004-08-18 12:27 PM


beautiful
Startime55
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8 posted 2004-08-18 12:29 PM


How perfectly your words of love flow...A delight to read...

Dark Angel
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9 posted 2004-08-19 08:34 AM


"I am your promise"

wahoooo, 'tis beautiful Soleil

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

vandana
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10 posted 2004-08-19 09:56 AM


good to see you back.i've missed you and your poetry
suthern
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11 posted 2004-08-19 11:50 AM


when you will be here, there with me

and no amount of light
when that day         our time comes
will see us
as other than one.

I am
your promise.

Oh, yessssssssssssssss. *S* Beautiful write! *S*

Ratleader
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12 posted 2004-08-22 10:21 AM


Allow me to echo that Suthern lass....Oh, Yessssssssssssssss!

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suthern
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13 posted 2004-08-27 03:04 PM


After almost a week with too little poetry... I came back for a revisit to this one... it's that impressive. *S*
miscellanea
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14 posted 2004-08-27 03:10 PM


Oh, no.  Now I'm going to have the Beatle's melody, Here, There, and Everywhere, floating in my head all day mixed up with your wonderful poetry.  Love the promise you write about.  Your words flow as smooth as silk.
                misc'e

iliana
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15 posted 2004-08-28 01:20 AM


  What Pell said....I repeat! ....jo
Goldenrose
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16 posted 2004-08-28 04:24 AM


Very nice ..thank you...

GR.

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