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Tempestuous
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Tempestuous |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Tempestuous love... you have said that I remind you of blood clotting, hardening on the surface of an injury... but those words become so wearisome in my memory. You've suggested that exposure is incapable of comfort, only after I've been stripped down to the bone and put on display. I am grateful for my impatience.. and for my rage. It is more chilling that I was not held, but made to be a subject of aesthetic pain. If I had a choice, I wouldn't forgive you, though you play my viens so well. You're perversity pains me, my requests remain empty. ~~ I've built a wall of clouds to hold you, a bland and bleak freedom. I've covered myself in sheets of rain... I promised I wouldn't wander too far away. My hands are so inadequate, loose in their grip of reality. I still felt nothing but the empty walls, and the bottomless oceans. I want so badly to strip you of your freedom... I want to hold you to steal your breath, and quicken your heartbeat once again... I am full of such greed, and my hunger is insatiable. Your hair reminds me of the moss on the trees, swaying freely in the wind... these things do not matter now, these tiny portraits formed into my sockets. I do not write anymore, this is all just an insane trick. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Meghan, you never cease to amaze me with your imagery and creativity. I felt the storm! Great write. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
tempestuous...I've been called that too. It never seemed to have a helpful effect on my mood either. But don't stop writing, meg. That would be a far greater insanity. And hey? I like tempestuous. It's boredom that kills me, and that you are not m'friend.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I want so badly to strip you of your freedom... I want to hold you to steal your breath, and quicken your heartbeat once again... I am full of such greed, and my hunger is insatiable kiddo... lines like these show me time and time again how the honesty of your words reaches out and touches .. far deeper I am sure, than you realize.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
this aches with realism and grit; and i do so understand this too don't play dead for any man ever........... so glad to see your strenth in words |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hey Kiddo, do you know how happy it made me to see you posting, I've missed you and this write is no acception... Fantastic imagry and real honest ta goodness gut feelings....very powerfully done! |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
I've built a wall of clouds to hold you, a bland and bleak freedom. I've covered myself in sheets of rain... I promised I wouldn't wander too far away. ~*~ You remain always as a force to be reckoned with and a poet that makes me stand, gawking. Ever amazed. Enjoyed this very much. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"I don't write anymore this is all just an insane trick" Haven't been writing lately, myself. But unlike mine, your efforts remain strong. Very nicely done |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
I want so badly to strip you of your freedom... I want to hold you to steal your breath, and quicken your heartbeat once again... I am full of such greed, and my hunger is insatiable. Your hair reminds me of the moss on the trees, swaying freely in the wind... these things do not matter now, these tiny portraits formed into my sockets. I do not write anymore, this is all just an insane trick. ````````````` WOW...incredibly powerful emotion here... |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
Wow. I mean... WOW. The first line describes this perfectly. You are a Fury. "Rage, Rage against the dying of the light". |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I haven't written lately either  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I want so badly to strip you of your freedom... I want to hold you to steal your breath, and quicken your heartbeat once again... I am full of such greed, and my hunger is insatiable. Your hair reminds me of the moss on the trees, swaying freely in the wind... these things do not matter now, these tiny portraits formed into my sockets. I do not write anymore, this is all just an insane trick. This is fantastic......whatever you do, don't stop writing. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Kazm Member
since 2003-11-13
Posts 99 |
I think everyone feels these things whether they are men or women. I know I do sometimes but you say them so much better than I ever could. Kaz |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this read |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I've built a wall of clouds to hold you, a bland and bleak freedom. I've covered myself in sheets of rain... I promised I wouldn't wander too far away. you have a way with images that i admire and envy always |
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