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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2004-08-17 01:02 PM


Within the black mud
Moist and thickened by blood
Oozing from deep bitten scab,
Sticky with the phlegm of the bad
Rising up despite the hold
To stand naked, festering and cold.

The soul summoned carcass
Filled with spiritual darkness
Exits the realm beyond the tomb
Into where he gathered his last gloom
Before descending to level five*
Penitence for the wasted time alive

The struggling repeat their doleful hymn
Still bubbling through the mud that makes him
He walks beneath a moonless night
Where deep are clouds blocking starlight
And cast a fog about the land that mourns
Moves as hidden as the evil that swarms.

Sloth consumes his very movements
Shuffling while great energy spent
To find freedom from torment at last
Another dark soul to deeper cast
And allow him to enter calm limbo
While replaced his soul down below.

Whom will he find to replace him,
Which evil soul will his searching send
When he next touches a living soul
The living will feel death’s deep cold
To dwell in tormentors twilight
Of pestilence and endless blight.

Gloom

*Level 5 The river Styx runs through this level of Hell, and in it are punished the wrathful and the gloomy.



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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2004-08-17 01:12 PM


Very impressive writing....I believe your best yet. Well done Proff.
Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2004-08-17 01:31 PM


Thank you, Gentle Spirit,
Pleased you enjoyed,
I suppose this is more my tone, my morbid hymn.

Gloom

Pell
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3 posted 2004-08-17 01:51 PM


Methinks you've indeed been reviewing "Inferno"?

Powerful writing, definitely sets the mood. A mood that makes my teeth itch, but the dread is intended I think? *smiles*

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2004-08-17 02:01 PM


Thank you, Pell,
Glad you liked,
T’is one of those I have access to always,
As for itchy teeth, try some chips and spicy salsa.

Gloom

Copperbell
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5 posted 2004-08-17 06:26 PM


deep - I hope there is some light in your day.  I enjoyed your writing


serenity blaze
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6 posted 2004-08-17 07:26 PM


I entered here, grinning at first--I thought perhaps another musical parody?

but I underestimated you, gloom, and that is something I rarely do.

I could have sworn I heard the voice of Vincent Price in my head as I read this.

Nobody does it quite the way you do...

grin.

Enjoyed.

iliana
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7 posted 2004-08-17 11:17 PM


Very, very gloomy....good and gloomy.  Sweet smile sent your way.  
passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2004-08-18 02:51 AM


some of us are just best at writing darkness
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9 posted 2004-08-18 03:42 AM


Incredible! Darkness becomes you. I look forward to more.
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Gaia
10 posted 2004-08-18 04:20 AM


within this poetry that is so deep
I really tried to find some sleep
but could not

why else would I be posting at this hour?

LOL, you are the master of gloom,
but you still make me smile

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