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Reflections on Grief - VIII
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Reflections on Grief - VIII |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Stranger Beneath the Skin Grief is debilitating All-absorbing, It disengages the ability To find a semblance Of normalcy Humiliation and mortification Accompany shame and regret As words spew Through sorrowing lips Every ear retreats in consternation The speaker’s most rapidly of all Schisms develop Distancing needed support And wardrobes offer only Discomfiture for garment Prematurely senescent minds Are capacious vacuums Unable to concentrate On anything but self Listless veins seeping spirit Become conduits for anger Indifference and lethargy Paralyze to prevent Contrition from being offered Having lost everything It’s easy to lose still more |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Easy to lose more every single day - truer words were never spoken. I hope you can send these to some place that will benefit from their wisdom? |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
this series is my favorite of all, it is, I believe, God given, you speak so perceptively so honest ...sigh... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Suthern beloved one, this is truly one of your most perceptive and insightful writes darling one. I know there are those who beg you to write other less painful words, but frankly YOU excel when you write like this. Exquisite flow, and the words are so truthful and revealing that I’m blown away. Of course there are those who will warble on about how the pain will ebb away, and that time heals, we know it does. That’s not what the series is about, I’m simply stunned by your ability, you can really, really write, and with lines produced as wonderfully well written as these you show it in no uncertain terms. Did I say that I utterly, utterly love this? Because I do as always Mushy    Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Mysteria: I don't know about that wisdom thing. *S* But I'm so glad this touched you. Thank you! *S* jellybeans: You, my friend, have been my standard... if you saw truth, I knew it was okay. *S* Thank you, my friend... so much! *S* Marsha: And one of those begging is me! LOL I feel like I have the skin stripped from me every time these babies come knocking. *S* Thank you so much, my friend. *S* |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Listless veins seeping spirit Become conduits for anger Indifference and lethargy Paralyze to prevent Contrition from being offered Having lost everything It’s easy to lose still more" Extremely well versed, sweet lady. This series has been extraordinary.  ....jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Prematurely senescent minds Are capacious vacuums Unable to concentrate On anything but self Listless veins seeping spirit Become conduits for anger Indifference and lethargy Paralyze to prevent Contrition from being offered Having lost everything It’s easy to lose still more ============================= damn...this is bone racking, skin shredding, bleeding out the eyes and heart poetry.... *whew* .... .... .... .... (ykikyk) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
vandana, iliana & JM: I know this series isn't an easy read... that just makes me appreciate even more those kind enough to do so... thank you! *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What do I choose, these lines? All-absorbing, It disengages the ability To find a semblance Of normalcy or this agonizing truth? Every ear retreats in consternation The speaker’s most rapidly of all If I do, will I short-change these? Prematurely senescent minds Are capacious vacuums Unable to concentrate On anything but self And what about the others? Every one is worth quoting and requoting.....though these shadows will haunt for a long time: Having lost everything It’s easy to lose still more No one does this better... no one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: Thank you so very much... your kind response means much to me... yes. *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I loved every word, but this series is so sad... I'd much rather you shared haikus of joy than odes of agony....I'd like to see you filled -- and fulfilled -- with happiness. If I could, I'd wave a magic wand over you and make that happen right now. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Perhaps I should read more of these. They are so right to the point.... I thought these lines were dead on....been there, done that...so to speak... Listless veins seeping spirit Become conduits for anger Indifference and lethargy Paralyze to prevent Contrition from being offered Having lost everything It’s easy to lose still more |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh...those last lines....yeah |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: You are so good to me, my friend... I don't think I could ever have completed this series without you and jellybeans assuring me it was worth the bleed. *S* I just hope you know the write helped... the friendships helped more. *S* Magnus: I appreciate you reading any of them so much. *S* Thank you very much! *S* PS: And what a wretched realization that is, right? *S* Thank you! *S* |
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