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suthern
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0 posted 2004-08-16 03:46 PM


Beyond Comprehension

Grief is unfathomable

Scents linger on
Beloved possessions
Only in imagination
But are inhaled greedily
In attempts to nourish
An unsatisfiable void

There is no logic
In one day being worse
Than those that preceded
Or will follow
But agonizing anniversaries
Of when joy ceased
Siphon sanity

Grief wields holidays
As instruments of torture
To be endured, not enjoyed
And reminds of milestones
That might have been
If only… if only

It skewers perception
And distorts memories
Rearranging scrapbook pages,
It elevates the departed
To early sainthood
Flaws and failings
Fade in significance
As even aggravations
Are sorely missed

Excruciating fall seems endless
In this bottomless pit
There are always lower floors



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1 posted 2004-08-16 03:52 PM


But agonizing anniversaries
Of when joy ceased
Siphon sanity

Grief wields holidays
As instruments of torture
To be endured, not enjoyed
And reminds of milestones
That might have been
If only… if only


This is truly damn excrutiating I have to tell you, and all too true.

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2 posted 2004-08-16 05:46 PM


There are always lower floors

oh lady, the power of this leaves me speechless.....and crying.......


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3 posted 2004-08-16 06:00 PM


Suthern beloved one, that is awesome writing darling heart, I’m struck dumb. ……………. I’d write a ream or two praising your writing but I’m truly struck dumb. You are some writer, and I’m left totally speechless. (And how often sweet one has that happened?) I know, I know almost never, you really have written a beauty here, this is powerful writing, and I love that line

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There are always lower floors
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Stunning writing

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy


Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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4 posted 2004-08-16 06:10 PM


When three of my favorite ladies leave such wonderful responses, I'm truly humbled.

Mysteria, jellybeans and Marsha... I thank each of you so very much... I wish none of us understood this. Thank you!

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5 posted 2004-08-16 06:50 PM


nice read
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6 posted 2004-08-16 07:44 PM


Scents linger on
Beloved possessions
Only in imagination
But are inhaled greedily
In attempts to nourish
An unsatisfiable void

======================

how timely this piece is for me...just yesterday I did this with Grandma's Chantilly powder as I was packing it away for the move.


There are always lower floors

and how powerful this piece....this series...
( moving on to the next one)

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7 posted 2004-08-16 07:47 PM


"But agonizing anniversaries
Of when joy ceased
Siphon sanity"

Oh, suthern girl, you surely do understand grief...no doubt about it.     Very well said.  ......jo

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8 posted 2004-08-17 02:01 PM


vandana, JM and iliana: Thank you so much, ladies... I appreciate your reads and responses! *S*
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9 posted 2004-08-17 04:19 PM


Laura, I have to be in just the right frame of mind before I read the poems in this series....because they shake me to the middle.

You know this far too intimately, and it's impossible to miss the absolute reality behind -- and in -- every word.

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10 posted 2004-08-18 09:00 AM


Ratleader: I'm grateful, my friend, that you read them at all. *S* Thank you very much!
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11 posted 2004-08-22 10:05 AM


I'm into excellent poetry -- so how could I not?

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12 posted 2004-08-22 12:45 PM


I need to collect the series to keep all at my fingertips
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13 posted 2004-08-22 12:48 PM


There is no logic
In one day being worse
Than those that preceded
Or will follow
But agonizing anniversaries
Of when joy ceased
Siphon sanity

Grief wields holidays
As instruments of torture
To be endured, not enjoyed
And reminds of milestones
That might have been
If only… if only


Yanno what?  There are no lines within these
that are lacking in truth and the belief
that you have been there as well.  Thanx
for the share.  Sorry I haven't read more
of them in recent days.

JamesMichael
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14 posted 2004-08-23 08:08 PM


Well said...James
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15 posted 2004-08-23 08:22 PM


Ruth,
It seems I have missed a few. But still I find this to be powerful writing.  Grief without growth is pain without purpose. My how you have grown.

I must say that I find in those days the opportunity to celebrate the lives cut short unexpectedly. Now I embrace the tears and find in them wet crystals of loving memories not forgotten. Peace...as your surely deserve it.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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16 posted 2004-08-23 08:44 PM


suthern,
   You tell it well, Lady!  I'll try to catch other works as soon as able.  Take care, S.S. (Sweet Suthern).
             misc'e

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17 posted 2004-08-27 03:33 PM


Ratleader: If that's flattery... I love it... yes!!! LOL

PS: You truly honor me, my friend... and I thank you so very much!

Magnus and Larry: Thank you so very much... I've had a great lesson in time deprivation lately... so I appreciate every read... I know how hard it is to find poetry time sometimes! *S*

And Larry... peace to you as well, my friend. *S*

JamesMichael: Thank you very much! *S*

miscellanea: That you should read even one during this recovery time means much to me! *S* Thank you very much! *S*

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