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Unopened....(Part 6) "FINI"
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Unopened....(Part 6) "FINI" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The spoon twirled around within the confines of the manly abode of beans...the sting of heat bringing to ears a slight sip..as eyes stare the floor and a beat pauses in ache’s linger. Those words, said perhaps billions of times in thousands of ways...sharing sadness and joy, often intermingled....and perhaps sheer terror and fright...as well. A husband would sweep her off of her feet, a father might cry of joy....or pain as well, hopeless pain of knowing a child bears a seed of life. Jack sat, pondering that which he might say, not knowing what words would bring solace to the shivers of her shoulders, or quell the tide of salt laden drip from blues...so beautiful to him. What might the stallion say to a mare awaiting the foal....when the snip has taken from him that which might bear fruit within the loins of a mare? Jack stood from his chair, slowly pushing it back and away from the table...His mind wished to hear the click again....only now, the click would bring to heart a wailing of lips....within and beyond the door... He walked slowly, cautiously toward the door, holding the smooth cold knob between fingers that trembled slightly.....his tongue against a palate, fearful of speech... And then.....he turned....returned, reached out softly, brushed away another tear....taking her into his arms....holding her softly....whispering softly.... “When the dance does bring to bear the beauty of one so vividly rare.... A man shall stand....beyond the door...your shadow of one....” “Forever and more...till my death does bring to my heart your tears once again...” They held each other....they wept...two shadows apart...now bonding as one. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
 Bravo -- great ending. I love happy endings. Thank you, dear Sir, for the journey. SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You know, Susan....that your latest addition to your list of tools might have had some slight degree of ...what is the right word? A slight degree of errrrrr...you know what I am trying to say... Thanx, hope your weather stays better than our own today.... Pouring rains..intermittent... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Dix...and you are welcome...I didn't want to see another WAHHHHH from you.... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That "snip" brought back a wonderful memory... of a couple I once knew several years ago... he had been "snipped" and she? LOL..."tucked" because between the two of them, they had six kids. This second marriage was going fine until she ended up expecting. Well, he was furious...and she was aghast, having been not only faithful, but very much in love with her husband... finally calmer heads prevailed for them BOTH to go in and get checked out. Her "tuck" didn't take quite as well as the doctors had thought...and he? LOL...well, after a few tests, it was determined that neither did his! He snapped a few suspenders in that it "all grew back..." and what a man HE was! LOL... There are times that He works in mysterious way. And apparently, that baby was meant to belong to them...  Don't you love it when stories work out with happy endings? Not all do... Good Job, BJ! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
BJ, are you sure this is the end? Sounds like the beginning to me! Well, this time...hehehe....thanks for putting "Fini" in the title so I can say the following, once again.........I loved this series! What intense love!  .....jo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Sun...enjoyed your input....quite similar...and this love shall not die between the two...even through adversity and shame... for love can forgive...as it has within this little story of mine. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Jo, letting you girls have a few moments of dreams, of wonderful things that whisk you away to far off places...that bring a sigh, and sometimes a tear....is the greatest gift given and received.... BJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling man, dear man, thank you, a happy ending when I didn’t believe one was possible. You’ve restored my faith and I’m smiling muchly. Perfect, a sigh of wonder just so perfect as always Mushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
BJ, you definitely do accomplish that!  ....jo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Barry,I read it in reverse and loved every moment of the read... *s M |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry so very... what a wonderful ending/beginning!! Try and stay out of the rain..I hope you have a peaceful night. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Take a bow! ~ and start a new series! ~ pretty please with a cherry on top!  A Fan  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
“When the dance does bring to bear the beauty of one so vividly rare.... A man shall stand....beyond the door...your shadow of one.... ================================= wowzers... I just love the romantic depth of that verse... a perfect poetic ending... well done poet sir... and I second the above requests for more series writings from you. |
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