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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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moods shift as the sands of the Sahara blown hither and thither mounding in joy hollowing in sorrow persuaded by the winds of circumstance carried away with the currents of happenstance ever changing a mosaic of emotion each dawn a new path defined yesterday’s way masked obscured by endless shifting into a new day’s direction ever flowing ceaseless transformation nomadic inclinations never settling into rest – never knowing an oasis – lost in its wandering . . . restlessness s.a.t. Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
restless... is such a difficult thing to describe and contain with words... I think you did it well |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oops! Perhaps this was not the best poem for me to read right now as I'm heading off to lala land! lol But I will tell you this, Dear Susan ~ you have described restlessness in a poetically beautiful manner! Sweet dreams!  Linda  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well described! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you all for your replies. I don't know that I'm 100% happy with this poem, it leaves me thinking it needs tweaking, but I'm uncertain as to what is not right about it. If it reads well, then I'm glad, but still, I wonder . . . hmmmmm.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Perfection dear poetess!  ...jo |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done...the swirling desert drape...ever changing, ever thirsting to be sated. TD |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Yeah... it's 4 AM here right now. I did sleep two hours this week though. Oh what a wonderful two hours it was... You explained it perfectly! Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
winds of circumstance I am not sure which lines I like best... so many good ones to choose from *s M |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Susan I am very much aware of restlessness, this poem fits my (often) mood perfectly...well done enjoyed ---------ice ><> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
it feels like the sea very moving |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A very good definition of wandering feet. Enjoyed this, Susan. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
ever flowing ceaseless transformation nomadic inclinations never settling into rest – never knowing an oasis – lost in its wandering . . . These lines say it all...to me... this is the feel that I sometimes have when the weather calls to me, and says "come out, let's play"... And, for whatever reason...I can not... THEN is when I feel what you have written so well. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
thank you all for your feedback. it is most encouraging and helps a great deal. hugs--  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well done, susan. It's a pleasing look at restlessness. |
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