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iliana
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0 posted 2004-08-12 02:03 AM


Perfect words don’t exist.
Have you ever pondered this?
The fact
There’s not just one
To tell the whole
Of night,
Moon so full
Of itself,
And bright,
But not a star.
It cannot grant your wishes
Or save the fishes that float
When too many irons stoke
The fires in seaport boats
Meant to nourish hunger
Instead of greed.
I need
One word to express my thoughts.
Could it be,
The world is hot?
No, that’s three too many.
See what I mean?
I’d like to see a word that’s lean,
Not flabby with embellishment
To convey my true sentiment.
I think somewhere,
Sometime,
There was a word
That did define
The restlessness of
Hearts yearning
In ways that we’re no longer learning.
Perhaps, too many words we know.
And words today are all for show.
Neanderthal might have known.
But the word I hunt with club and stone
Left with him, and can’t be found.    

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1 posted 2004-08-12 02:16 AM


hunger,  dont ask me but that popped in  my head, must be hungry, my restless heart is hungry for love,the feel of desire,the taste of passion . or longing, good write  LMAO sorry


iliana
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2 posted 2004-08-12 02:25 AM


MGROVES, I thought this would draw in some humor but was surprised it happened with the first post.  Actually, hunger is a good word but it still doesn't get it all.  The poem is mostly BS, just playing.  In the Indonesian language there is a word for which there is no English equivalent.  The word is "cocok" (hope I spelled it right, pronounced chochoke) -- the closest meaning in our language is "harmonious" but that does not encompass the spiritual essence that accompanies the Indonesian word.  For me, that word, cocok was a perfect word which I came to understand the meaning of when I lived there for a short time.  That's what brought on my pondering (just in case you were curious...)  Thanks for your post.  And...you'd better feed your need.  lol   ....jo
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3 posted 2004-08-12 03:01 AM



i like it
when one line runs one thought into another.

and, i like cocok



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4 posted 2004-08-12 03:11 AM


Yep, I've pondered it too.
Great minds think alike, right?
Well, there's nothing else to do when I can't sleep... and it really does seem like there should be a perfect word.
In reading your poem I couldn't get the idea of The Lost Chord, out of my head. Of course, now I'll have that hymn stuck in my head all night. Maybe, The Lord Word, though
Love reading you... Take care!

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

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5 posted 2004-08-12 03:27 AM


what a mind! awesome write!
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6 posted 2004-08-12 05:31 AM


thanks for explaining. love to learn not hungery any more. very good writing,and interesting    thanks


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7 posted 2004-08-12 05:40 AM


I believe the words exist
On this I must insist
Or else my words lack meaning
And no one will be gleaning
What I wish to say
When entering in word play.
Yes I know
Words come and go
And some can pile them high
With words that are but a lie
Or there are those the stumble
When speaking mumble
So you really don’t know what they say
And they probably want it that way
Because if not
Their words won’t be forgot
And they’d be understood
Which wouldn’t be good
For the humble and shy,
But I’m not that sort of guy
I want to find the right word
I want to be heard
It’s just my way.
There are those letters that blend
Words like “you’re my friend”
And I think
They should never be extinct.

Gloom

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8 posted 2004-08-12 05:46 AM


I enjoyed your tumbling thoughts ~ but they certainly weren't jumbled! You non-sensically made lots of sense! ~ and in this world, that is not at all common! lol

Chinese

Loveulotzuknow!

Linda
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9 posted 2004-08-12 07:50 AM


the words are ours and we do the best we can to describe for others to be enlightened by
and you girl, do an incredible job, painting imagry for us all to savor.

Good one!

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10 posted 2004-08-12 07:55 AM


iliana
All true and a beautiful write.

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11 posted 2004-08-12 09:30 AM


Ah...to have that word at our disposal
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12 posted 2004-08-12 09:34 AM


even the "perfect" word or words are often misinterpreted...

enjoyed

M

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13 posted 2004-08-12 09:59 AM


enjoyed this Jo....nicely put!

I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me
I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind

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14 posted 2004-08-12 10:17 AM


Makes alot of sense....well thought out gal
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15 posted 2004-08-12 10:20 AM


jo, this is beyond good.  Wow, and wow again.  wise and thoughtful and a great concept.  

Susan

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16 posted 2004-08-12 10:55 AM


nice read
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17 posted 2004-08-12 01:55 PM


Jo,
  You know I can relate to this, being the heavily weighted right brainer that I am.  Words are difficult for me to understand, as well as to produce with clarity.  They get me into trouble a lot, as other think their meanings are as clear as H20.  I'm having trouble with my computer at work.  I hope this comes off ok.
      cathy    

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18 posted 2004-08-12 02:18 PM


AH! One word. I think not. To many to capture your imagination, the light within your soul and the song singing within your heart.
From The Dictionary
BonBon LOL

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19 posted 2004-08-12 03:59 PM


Serendipitous...KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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20 posted 2004-08-12 07:04 PM


Technology and the efficiency of how we
reap,  sowing very little is somewhat scary
to me....for what does our future hold for
us?  IF we continue to drive recklessly down
Nature's highway.

You said it perfectly...Thank you Jo.

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21 posted 2004-08-13 12:59 PM


Sometimes perfect words do exist...when they are the words we wanted to hear...James
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22 posted 2004-08-13 01:17 AM


Liked this part:

There was a word
That did define
The restlessness of
Hearts yearning
In ways that we’re no longer learning.

I agree with muted- love the way you flow one thought into the next, spiraling like a...a...um... slinky...
Wonder what a Neanderthal would make of that? Clever write

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23 posted 2004-08-13 01:29 AM


LIFE

that 'bout sums it up for me

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24 posted 2004-08-18 03:51 PM




(smiles) I believe that is just the beauty of poetry; we always seek out to discover pieces of everything and though an all-encompassing word like that may be fossil now, there are so many beautiful children of a word that is encased in amber throughout this beautiful world that we find in the hearts of children, the breath of a lover, the majestic flight of a butterfly, etc. (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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25 posted 2004-08-18 04:13 PM


I’d like to see a word that’s lean,
Not flabby with embellishment
To convey my true sentiment.

~*~

Sigh.

Ok.  I'll put my poems on a diet.


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26 posted 2004-08-18 04:50 PM


This is absolutely terrific iliana. It's a pleasure to read you.

Maree

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~Stevie Nicks~

iliana
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27 posted 2004-08-19 02:07 AM


and to all you kind poets.  This was 100% mused....and special note to Sunshine, no please don't change anything about the way you write.  I really am much too wordy myself sometimes but agree with comments above, especially Noah's, about the children of the first word. I would not ever want to suggest that anyone change their style.  This was simply a musing.  
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