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Sunshine
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0 posted 2004-08-11 09:23 PM



Together



Someone snapped a twig,
My mate and I set our wing ~
Tandem, we snap reach.
Someone touched a leaf, this, felt,
Caution's flung ~ we stretch for wind.

© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-08-11 09:36 PM


Beautiful photo and such awareness of nature is shown here.  The alertness of the birds at a single sound is astounding.  I compare this to the awareness I have.  I'm lucky to hear the alarm clock!!!  This was fun to read and contemplate.
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2 posted 2004-08-11 10:02 PM


"Someone touched a leaf, this, felt,
Caution's flung ~ we stretch for wind."

What a setting; how beautiful both the flow of the words and the photo.  Much enjoyed, SIL.   ......jo

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3 posted 2004-08-12 03:12 AM


I like the way this write takes flight quickly, just as the birds did.
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5 posted 2004-08-12 06:14 AM


"We stretch for wind" ~ Love that line!

~ and "Together" is such a beautiful word!
Holding Hands

Have a wonderful day together!



Linda
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6 posted 2004-08-12 06:54 AM


The wings flash in the soft darkness .... beautifully captured love-flight!
Love, Margherita

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7 posted 2004-08-12 07:01 AM


holiday travelers every single day!
Enjoyed both the snapshot and your words which protray something fabulously recognized.  thank you for sharing

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