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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2004-08-11 08:18 AM


I need to win the lottery
So I can concentrate on poetry,
I’ll move out to the country
And leave the dank city
And perhaps write things pretty.

But the dollars are just tossed away,
I only lose if I even play
And end up with a poorer day
And in this dismal trap I stay.

I need a new night light
My old burns not bright
As age dims sight.

I need a new vase
The old has fallen from its place
Maybe by a casual pass
Turned to just shattered glass.

These are just phantom needs
Going to nowhere where wishing leads

Gloom


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LeeJ
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1 posted 2004-08-11 08:33 AM


hey Gloom, its good to have dreams
and they do come true...a great read
thanks a bunch for writing and sharing.
  Good morning

Midnitesun
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2 posted 2004-08-11 10:07 AM


LOL, after I'm completely awake, I'll tell you what my first reaction was today when seeing the word "phantom."
But I can tell you now, I really liked that straight-shooting ending.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-08-11 10:47 AM


C'mon beggar...let's ride our horses...
because I find myself wishing for a lot, too.


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4 posted 2004-08-11 11:34 AM


Professor, your poetry is like a light - revealing things that you see - and so often you offer the roses that perhaps once belonged in your broken vase - for all of us to take a sniff-

hope you have a nice day

passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-08-11 12:27 PM


yep
Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2004-08-11 01:12 PM


Alls one need do is believe in their dreams,
sometimes it may seem like their a long time coming, but they can come true.   
Very well done Proff.

Professor Gloom
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7 posted 2004-08-11 02:12 PM


Thank you all
For taking the time to read and respond

Gloom

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8 posted 2004-08-11 02:19 PM


"These are just phantom needs
Going to nowhere where wishing leads"

Aren't goals phantom needs? One needs goals...

I never could understand my grandmother's familiar quotation which Sunshine alluded to:  "If wishes were horses, beggars could ride."
I always wondered why everyone couldn't ride.
I second Sunshine's motion, "Ride, Professor, ride!"


iliana
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9 posted 2004-08-11 10:16 PM


Ah, but sir, you see....you are still writing.  Wonderful and don't we all wish?!   ....jo
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10 posted 2004-08-11 11:50 PM


great writing, glad i stopped


Martie
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11 posted 2004-08-12 12:02 PM


Gloom

"I need to win the lottery
So I can concentrate on poetry,
I’ll move out to the country
And leave the dank city
And perhaps write things pretty."

Me too!  I think we all wish for something magic to sweep us away to a better place...when what we maybe should do, is find the poetry in the pretty where we are.  

Not always easy to do.  Enjoyed your poem!

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