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Tim
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0 posted 2004-08-10 11:54 PM


She’s the purest note of nightingale,
First gentle breath of dawn,
The cooling whisper of night’s breeze,
Sweet song of heaven’s spawn.

She’s music of an angel’s harp,
Aglaia from on high,
The gloried blaze of comet’s path,
Across a midnight sky.

She is the ink upon the page,
That tells of one true love,
And takes one close in warm embrace,
To soar night skies above.

She is the sparkle of sun,
Upon high mountain’s snow,
A racing brook down mountain’s side,
To verdant plains below.

She is a spire of billowed cloud,
That hides the summer sear,
A petaled wildflower of the lea,
With fragrant scent so dear.

She is the gateway to the stars,
The path to heaven’s portal,
Whose kiss each night on weathered brow,
Turns a simple man immortal.

© Copyright 2004 Tim - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2004-08-11 03:15 AM


She is the gateway to the stars,
The path to heaven’s portal,
Whose kiss each night on weathered brow,
Turns a simple man immortal.

Brought a tear and joy to my eyes, this did.
The visuals are lovely, and oh so loving.

"She's" one lucky lady who deserves and inspires the beauty of your musings.

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2004-08-11 03:17 AM


Is she real? what a wonderful write, for someone very special
iliana
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3 posted 2004-08-11 03:41 AM


Tim, this was really lovely!   ....jo
A Romantic Heart
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4 posted 2004-08-11 05:13 AM


Beautiful thoughts for a beautiful person!

~ARH

"The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched.They must be felt with the heart."~Helen Keller (1880-1968)


LeeJ
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5 posted 2004-08-11 06:25 AM


a first gaze at daylight...what a generous way to say...good morning sunshine

Lovely

Toerag
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Ala bam a
6 posted 2004-08-11 08:15 AM


nice love poem...I could have written this about my dog....LOL....
Susan
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walking the surreal
7 posted 2004-08-11 10:19 AM


Beautiful.  And the ending, captured my heart -- sigh.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2004-08-11 10:23 AM


She's

quite fortunate...

Bonnie j
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9 posted 2004-08-11 10:45 AM


Lovely words you have shared with us this morning.
BonBon

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
10 posted 2004-08-11 12:57 PM


so very lovely Tim...and I always look for  the response ofShe

~smiling~ at the view
M

Martie
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11 posted 2004-08-11 02:08 PM


Tim

She, must be wonderful, as this poem certainly is!

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 2004-08-12 12:11 PM


Absolutely beautiful...it's no wonder I find inspiration through your words
CastleGuard
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13 posted 2004-08-12 10:51 AM



A beautiful tribute to "She". The last stanza delivers a nice wrap up, and the last line is a perfect closing, one of the best I have seen.

Well done, Tim.

CG

vandana
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14 posted 2004-08-12 10:53 AM


NICE READ
Earth Angel
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15 posted 2004-08-12 02:31 PM


If you keep writing poetry as wonderful as this, you yourself will be immortal!

Love & Light
EA
Flower

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16 posted 2004-08-12 02:32 PM


what a lucky lady she is...
this is a sigh waiting to be captured!

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