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marcel
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0 posted 2004-08-10 11:28 PM


Underneath a Quiet Smile

Give me a flower on a sunny day
And watch me pluck the petals, one by one
Until they cry to the ground
While my hypercritic self smiles;
The shameless snicker of my shadow,
Blocks the light from true intentions
As my quiet charm devours innocence and beauty.

Give me sorrow on a balmy day
And watch cruelty kiss my soul
With passionate and joyous infliction,
Until sweet agony repays me many favors
In tears that bond me to the ground’s return,
Searching for the fallen flower petals of my past---
But in reality, fair is fair in selfish love,
Because flowers do not blossom in darkness
And a man’s heart is free only in death.

Marcel

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2004-08-10 11:37 PM


But in reality, fair is fair in selfish love,
Because flowers do not blossom in darkness
And a man’s heart is free only in death.

I hope for myself, I will not be born again where shadows fall in the darkness.  
I'm leaning towards a flower meadow and running with the thought.

Wonderful expression, Marcel~
Enjoyed, very much.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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2 posted 2004-08-11 03:48 AM


Much appreciated what you've said here in such well expressed verse.  .......jo
passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-08-11 04:36 AM


I think you're right
ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2004-08-11 10:19 PM


Powerful expressions...
We are all intimidated by our shadow selves...
Our views differ on freedom, but excellent poetry brings full agreement.

MGROVES
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5 posted 2004-08-11 11:32 PM


powerful writing. like it


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