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ChemicalRepose Member
since 2004-03-28
Posts 102 |
Knee deep in this shallow pool Me, the silent fool? Underestimating everything and everyone, I've come to find all but my mind, just waiting for the perfect time. The falls become stagnant, have they been defeated? The plaque swept through unseen, a veil of smiles to distract me. I feel the disease intruding, weakening my empty heart. Somber days are filled with rain, sullen streams,and a deadly breeze. Sprawled out between the lies and deceit. Make me silent, in order to bring me to my knees. Like I've said, I'm numb. So go in deeper. I can't feel a thing anyway. Go in deeper and deeper, and find some comfort. A promise echoes about in my solitary silence, I'm savoring it again in order to deny another savaged end. Sacrifice some or all? A disappointment, again, for sure. Like a silent night, or a deserted hole. A raging river, to forget he loved her, embrace the power, lightening already struck here. The dark of your shadow hides your virtue. I'm starving, so (edited by Moderator) hungry now. Look what you have done, but I'll starve or do anything just as long as I don't desire the raven. The shackles of a spectacle, or the temptress who sabotaged my tender soul. I tried feeding a bottomless pit, to be deserted pitilessly. Destined to apathy. [This message has been edited by Snow (08-11-2004 07:20 AM).] |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
wow...good job. I like the flow of it, smooth. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Like I've said, I'm numb. So go in deeper. I can't feel a thing anyway. Go in deeper and deeper, and find some comfort. Aww, the angst, it makes you wonder. What a great poem....sad to say, I understand the pain and sorrow. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Knee deep in this shallow pool Me, the silent fool?" Not so silent....this shouts! Good job. |
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