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Ericc
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0 posted 2004-08-10 03:08 PM



Not so...

This layer speaks only of its
pressing moment.

Your fingers tell one story.

My lips holding the weight of
your caress...

Tell another.

There is completeness only on the
line we share in traveled
contact.

And every layer is a truth revealed in
the fullness of a moment.

Yet my lips whisper..."not so, not
so..." As they taste the gravity
of your fingers.

There is no truth, there is no
story and there are no
layers.

There is only the suchness of
your caress...

And the memories that fall
later.

© Copyright 2004 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2004-08-10 03:18 PM


Eric, this was extremely deep and beautifully done.  Check your email please

Margherita
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Eternity
2 posted 2004-08-10 03:20 PM


quote:
There is completeness only on the
line we share in traveled
contact.




You are the Master in rendering the fullness of the moment, in savouring the chalice of love to the very last drop ......
and with each drop you create ripples touching the heart .... where the memories linger ...
Not so?!
I love you.
Margherita

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2004-08-10 03:26 PM



~ May all of your days bring sweet memories for your tomorrows...

EA
Rose

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4 posted 2004-08-10 03:29 PM


Ohhhh Eric...this is so soft and sensual and so very lovely.  This I liked, VERY MUCH!
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 2004-08-10 07:09 PM


perfect
JamesMichael
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6 posted 2004-08-10 07:41 PM


So...James
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2004-08-10 11:24 PM


So very beautiful Eric!
Hugs~

~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world
       ....have obviously never danced in the rain ~

Kahlil
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8 posted 2004-08-11 01:05 AM


"There is only the suchness of
your caress..."

oh, my heart!

K

iliana
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9 posted 2004-08-11 03:35 AM


"And every layer is a truth revealed in
the fullness of a moment.

Yet my lips whisper..."not so, not
so..." As they taste the gravity
of your fingers.

There is no truth, there is no
story and there are no
layers.

There is only the suchness of
your caress...

And the memories that fall
later."

*sigh* You have said this so well.  I really liked the way you made this a one-ended conversation with touch being the other end of that conversation.   ....jo


passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2004-08-11 04:41 AM


wow

wow

Susan
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walking the surreal
11 posted 2004-08-11 10:10 AM


One could become lost in such moments -

Beautiful.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

MGROVES
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12 posted 2004-08-12 12:57 PM


wow  deep indeed


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