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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2004-08-10 09:24 AM





It comes to me, this sweet melody
stirred softly on gentle wind.
I hear the spirit of wild inside

   {tambourines echo through night’s silence}

Dark eyes still pierce my soul
when breezes stir this ballet of trees.

Flames flicker,

memories silhouette

still burns        images

traced in desires hold.

Tonight the stars dance
       {a sway of lovers song}
in their own rhythm divine

and again I am entranced,
mesmerized
by the sound
of your   gypsy lullaby.


It's better than I could have planned..
it's made me who I am...
{Trace Adkins}

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2004-08-10 09:28 AM


entranced in the gypsy of his soul...what a write girl!  Beautifully expressed in words that are a pleasure to read...always!

Hiya, and good morning, wishing you a lovely day!

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-08-10 09:29 AM


ah, that clangy, tangy, tambourine...
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2004-08-10 09:31 AM


nicely done...

  the form and content both providing the reader with the wistful and longing.. of a heart drawn by melodies that maybe only it can hear...

enjoyed this ma'am... indeed so far one of my favorites from you..

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2004-08-10 09:35 AM


Lee, I never quite thought of it that way, but
yes, I love the way you define it.  Good morning
back at you doll.

Ah but mum, sometimes it's not a clangy sound,
but a soothing rhythm.  hugs.

Cpat, I love this
"a heart drawn by melodies that maybe only it can hear..."
and yes perhaps that is exactly what it is
something that each person hears inside.  
Thank you much sir *lil curtsies*

It's better than I could have planned..
it's made me who I am...
{Trace Adkins}

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5 posted 2004-08-10 09:39 AM


"Dark eyes still pierce my soul
when breezes stir this ballet of trees."

~ I do believe this is what is referred to as "p-o-e-t-r-y"!!!

Love & Light,
Linda
Flowers

Susan
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6 posted 2004-08-10 10:28 AM


Oooooh, lovely.  Filled with magic -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
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7 posted 2004-08-10 12:34 PM


ah...sweeet!
Professor Gloom
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8 posted 2004-08-10 01:55 PM


I’ll light the Bon Fire,
You bring the tambourine
I’ll bring the wine
You play the song
Perhaps we’ll dance
And talk till the embers grow cold

Enjoyed your poem

Gloom

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9 posted 2004-08-10 02:06 PM



Linda dear lady, thank you so much for that!

Thanks Susan magical moments just
have that effect on us.  lol....thanks so much.

Ahhh Dixie my poet sister, thank you!

That is such a warm thought Proff,
thanks so much for that.

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10 posted 2004-08-10 11:34 PM


there is something about those gypsies, that just mention of their singing and music makes anyone feel free!

and makes ya feel like dancing in circles!

loved this

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11 posted 2004-08-10 11:40 PM


Flames flicker,

memories silhouette

still burns        images

traced in desires hold.

Yea, that!!  Oh Donna, hugs sweetie~

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12 posted 2004-08-11 03:45 AM


Oh, Donna, I can feel this....it's calling to me to dance free, this gypsy song.  Much enjoyed.   ....jo
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13 posted 2004-08-11 11:53 PM


Really nice...James
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14 posted 2004-08-12 12:23 PM


very nice


Gentle Spirit
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15 posted 2004-08-12 07:20 AM


My thanks and appreciation to each of you. I wish there were more time right now to be here, so I apologize for the group replies.
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16 posted 2004-08-12 06:15 PM


GentlestSpirit~
Oh YES dear girlie ... you know I like it very much~
Thank you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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