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Ocean 133 |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Eastward from the sands View the blue, Rolling, rolling to the land; Sigh the sky, Pushing piling clouds to stand, Darker, dark, Shade as made the twilight can, Blown and thrown Done till sun rules sky again. Playful porpoises Drifting, lifting over waves, Flew in blue, Leaping, leaping water plays; Clouds then crowds Moving shade cools spots of day, Then sinking Through shadows sinking away. Gloom The Chinese Shan-Sui-Shih poetry (Poetry of Mountains and Rivers) of the Third and Fourth Centuries was the returning to natural innocence or purity of nature. The repeating word, rhyme or phrase in a line style is a innovation from the earlier Han Dynasty comes from the transforming the songs of the peasants to written poetry. That earlier poetry was mostly about relationships and historical event. Here I blend the earlier style with the similar later subject matter much as Wang Wei did in the Early T’ang Dynasty. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
one can feel from your writing that all is essential and connected, without one, the other would not survive... This was an enjoyable view...now I'm sitting here wishing I were a porpoise???? Look at what you did...bad boy...baaaaadddd boy! Smiles and hugs |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very enjoyable read ... deeply relaxing. Thank you for the information too. Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, You did your homework and I give you an A. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, LeeJ, You are kind in your praise, And that is the feeling I wished to convey, all is connected. This was written on the Delmarva Outer Banks as I read beneath the umbrella and watched over a dozen porpoises play in the waves. I almost put my book down and swam out to them, but the sun was rather intense beyond my shade and the waves rather rough form my old body. Thank you, Margherita, Pleased you enjoyed, the information comes from the books I was reading, just light reading of Chinese history and poetry. Thank you, Seymour, Glad you liked, but this was beach fun, not home work. Gloom |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I always enjoy your poems; you let others see through your eyes. In so many ways poetry surpasses a photograph; it can dig so much deeper. Thank you for sharing your talent so freely.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! thanks for sharing that! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Westward from the Sea Breezes blew Cloud formations clouding thoughts Not missing what wasn't There or anywhere.. And I am way to tired To complete and share... but I tried...or thought I did *s |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Copperbell, Pleased you enjoyed. These days, I find less time for poetic endeavors, Especially reading from my own library. I share with the what I can, when I can. Thank you, passing shadows, You are kind in your response. Thank you, Nakdthoughts, You tried and made a nice poetic response. Gloom |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You know, Professor, I think you would be a great professor of poetry! Honestly! This is just wonderful and so informative. It also answers my question as to whether you had a good time at the beach.  ....jo |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
this is so smooth when reading it, just rolls so softly. Very well done Proff. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Iliana you mean I’m not already? Oh well, at least I can please a few with my fumbling of words, Glad you enjoyed. Thank you, Gentle Spirit, Always a pleasure to know you enjoyed my words. Gloom |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Prof, this is a beautiful write. Very clear captures of a scene. I just camp back from camping witha couple friends, and while walking along the shore we saw a seal swimming around beneath the sunset... you're write reminded me of that. Thank you Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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