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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2004-08-10 12:10 PM


         


Euphoric Eloquence


There are words
falling all around me ...

yet, I am at a loss, lacking voice.
I understand now, it is by choice.

So I question everything ...
exploring each edge, following
the curves of my constant curiosity.

This wonder and wanderlust of water
and how the sky sequesters me.
I only breathe when I am immersed
in blues and greens.


I only exist when in motion with the
currents of creeks swirling over stone,
of rivers winding between white bluffs,
of lakes lapping sandy banks.

All of which hold me a "woman in waiting"
until my reprise to the reverie of shorelines
cadenced by wave curls.

'Til then I am resplendently restless ...
urged on by all that I have yet to witness.
Enticed by euphoric explorations and
defined by the discoveries, seduced by
the sky in it's resonating rituals of renewal.

Time and again I am drawn here, returning
to where trees whisper the truths of the wind
and rocks keep the secrets of water.

And I wonder if this creek I worship, is as
impressed with the ripples I make in my
water inspired awakening.

Still, no words have I, that would justify
the depth my spirit is eloquently effected by
the echo of water spilling across mosaic.

It is in these prophecy promised moments,
ancient legacies handed down by seasons in
change, that I am baptized in sacred waters,
allowing me to be intimate with earth and sky.


There are words falling all around me ...


shattering, scattering like stars,
staining, straining to be heard,
remaining unwritten, unspoken.

Their colors sustain me,
Their silence contains me,
all that's never said, will be
what explains me.



                            ~*~


         

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*photos taken at Castlewood State Park*


I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue



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1 posted 2004-08-10 12:17 PM


Still, no words have I, that would justify
the depth my spirit is eloquently effected by the echo of water spilling across mosaic"

~*~

I have no words that can describe how this makes me feel, as you know....such beauty and peace in every word.... thank you for this...a treasure to keep and reread ....

I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me
I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind

Kahlil
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2 posted 2004-08-10 12:28 PM


JM:  This is a masterpiece.

"Time and again I am drawn here, returning
to where trees whisper the truth of the wind
and rocks keep the secrets of water."

Lovely...

keeping it, thank you
K
  

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3 posted 2004-08-10 12:38 PM


Lovely Janet...James
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2004-08-10 01:54 AM


"all that's never said, will be
what explains me."

That's because this woman who loves words defies definition, not knowing that she is the muse...

That is you and you are so beautiful, Jan.

Smiling wide and hugging me. thanks for this'n



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5 posted 2004-08-10 02:19 AM


"And I wonder if this creek I worship, is as
impressed with the ripples I make in my
water inspired awakening."

Janet Marie, I suspect that this creek loves you as much as you love it!  I am totally in love with this poem! ! !  I cannot tell you how much I adore it, you'll just have to believe me.   ....jo

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6 posted 2004-08-10 02:34 AM


"seduced by
the sky in it's resonating rituals of renewal."
no words, heh?
whatcha call these jewells?

Damn, but if only I could release something this wonderful from my keyboard! Your alliterations tempt the tongue like fine wine.

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7 posted 2004-08-10 03:33 AM


thanks for sharing this...
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8 posted 2004-08-10 07:05 AM


Keeping this one up top today--I can't tell you how happy this one made me.

Sure I can.

I just did.

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9 posted 2004-08-10 07:14 AM


What's this?  What?  
A moth lands and sweeps us off our feet?

OMG...



all waters sooner, or later, run to the sea, sweetie...there has to be a starting point, just as you have learned.  And being in the middle of the beginning isn't so bad...not when you think your own ripples will someday become crashing waves...

I understand now...that you only write under personal pressure...[all boxes are packed, right?]



quote:
It is in these prophecy promised moments,
ancient legacies handed down by seasons in
change, that I am baptized in sacred waters,
allowing me to be intimate with earth and sky.


There are words falling all around me ...



'Zactly!

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10 posted 2004-08-10 07:16 AM


Janet Marie
You are the pictures, the words and the spirit. With a heart that encompases it all.
And to share moments with you are my fantasy. WWRS
Excellence is its own master.

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11 posted 2004-08-10 07:18 AM


quote:
It is in these prophecy promised moments,
ancient legacies handed down by seasons in
change, that I am baptized in sacred waters,
allowing me to be intimate with earth and sky.




Exceptional write and exceptional pictures.
I am truly awed.
... and keep it.
Love, Margherita

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12 posted 2004-08-10 07:37 AM


JM, You leave me speechless and prove that we are a very signficant part of everything...what explains me, you ask?  Perhaps quit simply, we are indeed a part of His plan...and are so honored to be...can you imagine where we'd be if we'd learn to accept that?  It is far beyond what any religion could interrupt...but, you, here, have touched it, felt it, and sensed all true being...well done!
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13 posted 2004-08-10 08:11 AM


Bravo ma'am!!!

Bravo!

you know I know how this feels and all it is... your words and the silence of those falling around you.. have described it beyond my own capacity to do so..



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14 posted 2004-08-10 08:14 AM


water and you
seems to be seamless
me wonders do your toes
have little webbies?

lovely art ms JM..

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15 posted 2004-08-10 09:03 AM


Janet, when I can do this justice with my words, I will be back ...
until then, just know that it indeed was worth the wait...
and I knew it would be pure perfection,
beauty and soul...


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16 posted 2004-08-10 09:14 AM


The beauty and eloquence of this entire post has me in a glorious state of euphoria!

The wait has been worth it!

J ustifiably
M agnificent

Love & Light,
EA
Flowers

Janet Marie
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17 posted 2004-08-10 09:41 AM


you guys sure know how to make a moths day.
Thank you so much for these replies...and I'll be back in a bit to reply to each, but I wanted to share some more views of this amazing place, I am so lucky this is less than a 10 minute drive. I hope you all will do a search and see whats close to you and find your own special place. If you live close to any river or larger lake, chances are there is some kind of reserve or park near it.
It is such an amazing release to walk along this river, see the sky thru the canopy of trees, feel the depth of the woods in its shade...and you just have to find a rock to claim, sit and listen to the rhythms of the water...*sigh*
Take an old pair of shoes and get in the water...
its "gleeeeeeeeeee" defined. *wink*

    


    


    


    


    



I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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18 posted 2004-08-10 09:52 AM


Indeed, Janet Marie, there are special places of heart all over...they exist because of the heart-eyes that see them truly.  This is so beautiful, beyond words, as are you!  
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19 posted 2004-08-10 10:32 AM


J, I had to go back and reread this,
savor it's depth.  Not often do
I offer what you can call "critique"
but I can tell you what I drew from this,
so for the first time ever here I go..

There are words
falling all around me ...

yet, I am at a loss, lacking voice.
I understand now, it is by choice.


This statement is so pure in thought
and truth, with heart on sleeve honesty
and the reader can feel the understanding
of it within.


So I question everything ...
exploring each edge, following
the curves of my constant curiosity.

This makes me realize how I am not alone
in this very same feeling...this need to
not just know, but understand....


This wonder and wanderlust of water
and how the sky sequesters me.
I only breathe when I am immersed
in blues and greens.

I only exist when in motion with the
currents of creeks swirling over stone,
of rivers winding between white bluffs,
of lakes lapping sandy banks.

All of which hold me a "woman in waiting"
until my reprise to the reverie of shorelines
cadenced by wave curls.

'Til then I am resplendently restless ...
urged on by all that I have yet to witness.

This draws the reader into this poem,
it screams of I want to see tomorrow,
live it, experience it.
Enticed by euphoric explorations and
defined by the discoveries, seduced by
the sky in it's resonating rituals of renewal.

Time and again I am drawn here, returning
to where trees whisper the truths of the wind
and rocks keep the secrets of water.



The calmness of the spirit when one is
in that safe place that sometimes only
each indiviual can claim as their own.
I can sense that feeling in these words.


And I wonder if this creek I worship, is as
impressed with the ripples I make in my
water inspired awakening.



Impressed? Me thinks more like in awe of
your spirit and grace gal.


Still, no words have I, that would justify
the depth my spirit is eloquently effected by
the echo of water spilling across mosaic.

It is in these prophecy promised moments,
ancient legacies handed down by seasons in
change, that I am baptized in sacred waters,
allowing me to be intimate with earth and sky.



This is a feeling of oneness with nature
and is so simplisitic but so very beautiful.


There are words falling all around me ...


shattering, scattering like stars,
staining, straining to be heard,
remaining unwritten, unspoken.

Their colors sustain me,
Their silence contains me,
all that's never said, will be
what explains me.


You wrap it up nicely with this closing
Janet.  There is a need to understand self,
and have the world understand us.
This is who I am, with total acceptance.
Me mothy friend, you have out done yourself.
and me, I am sitting here smiling...
at the beauty of you.




{I wanna cry like the rain
Cry like the rain
Shine like the sun on a beautiful mornin'
Sing to the heavens like a church bell ringin'
Fight with the devil and go down swingin'
Fly like a bird
Roll like a stone
Love like I aint afraid to be alone
Take everything that this world has to give
I wanna take any breath I can get
I wanna live } Josh Gracin

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-10-2004 11:45 AM).]

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20 posted 2004-08-10 05:11 PM


Still, no words have I, that would justify
the depth my spirit is eloquently effected by
the echo of water spilling across mosaic


Janet Marie...the beauty in this is you, all of you.

it's a keeper.

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Janet Marie
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21 posted 2004-08-10 06:20 PM


Lauren ... that you found peace in this is more than enough..thanks sweet poetess & heart hugs

Kahlil ... no, thank you kind poet...very much.

James ... thank you for the lovely, glad you enjoyed.

Sen ... hug yourself again--once for me... thank you baby...yes so good for me.(ykikyk)
love you KA

iliana ... what a wonderful thing to say...and of course I believe you. *smile* thank you for such a lovely response.

Kacy ... youre the jewel...and I know you appreciate the allits. lol
thank you so much girlie.

Dixie ... and I thank you for stopping by.

Kari ... LOL at the "under pressure" ...I think my muse was so peeved that I stayed home and packed all weekend rather than go to the creek, that this just had to break. Actually...some of the lines were scribbled on the moving boxes so I wouldnt forget them. LOL  thank you for knowing me so well and for your lovely reply.

Sy-babes ... you are the winkie of me mothy heart...thank you so much.

Margherita ... thank you so much, I am honored, Im so pleased you enjoyed.

Lee ... yes... we are all a part...for me its such a high, such a spiritual enlightening to be in this place. thank you for such a lovely response.

Ron ... a bravo for you means so much as I do indeed know what the rivers and creeks mean to you...So many times your writing touches on that theme and I feel connected to the words...trust me my friend...your "capacity" is pure poetry.

DS ... *smiling* ...I wont tell if you dont...*wink* ( but I''l take pics) LOL

Linda ... and your enthusiastic reply does the same for me...thank you so much lovely poetess.

Martie ... you are such a lovely flower.. thank you so much sweets. heart hugs back.

Donna ... thank you very much for your wonderful and insightful reply... " not just know, but understand" ... yesssss... exactly. Thank you girlie, for reading me so well and for both of your generous, sweet replies. I appreciate all that you invest in my slight muse, thank you for finding this worth the wait. *smile*

Maree ... thank you so much groovy girl... I am honored to be kept by you. *wink*

thank you ALL for your support, enouragement and kindness of my writing.
I have learned so much here, and found so much inspiration..even though I go months in between writing....but  I have come to realize that as much as I love writing poetry, I understand that sometimes things are felt so deeply that I just cant encompass it in words...and that just feeling it is enough. I guess me and my moody muse made peace in the creek.. LOL

thanks everyone... very much







I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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22 posted 2004-08-10 07:06 PM


It's hard to choose which is more beautiful, the poem or the pictures that accompany it...both are spectatular
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23 posted 2004-08-10 07:33 PM


I just popped back in and was treated to more of your splendiferous photos! This whole post is full of treasures for the spirit and the eyes!
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24 posted 2004-08-10 07:36 PM


Breathtaking dear Janet...simply spectacular.
Thank you for this treasure.
I am in awe of your talent!!

~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world
       ....have obviously never danced in the rain ~

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25 posted 2004-08-10 07:54 PM


With scenery like this,  it is no wonder that
you wrote such a poem, so fitting.  

Excellent is an understatement.

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26 posted 2004-08-10 08:03 PM


and just in case someone missed it:
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grin? MUAH!

congratulations lady, you made me into a moth as you became the flame...

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27 posted 2004-08-10 10:35 PM


Dear Janet Marie, you write the world that surrounds you, like none other.  
You are truly beautiful inside and out, and your poetry is always worth waiting for.

Passions wouldn't be the same without your mothy flutterings.  
Thank you for sharing the beauty that is you.

Janet Marie
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28 posted 2004-08-11 08:02 AM


Ruth ... hey there hoot-girlie...how wonderful to see you...thank you so much for stopping by, so glad you enjoyed.

Linda... I'll keep adding pics as I reply, I love sharing the beauty of this beautiful place, thank you for stopping back in.

Nancy... welcome back groovy girl...thank you for such a lovely response.

Barry ... thank you so much poet sir for such a generous response, thanks for walking in the creek with me. lol

Sen? are you still hugging yourself? yer so good to me... thank you me twin o heart.

Lori ... what a sweet thing to say.. thank you so much Bluesy-girl...I know you love the water too... thanks for playing in the creek with me.

thank you again to all who shared  some of you with me ...
we could have one heck of a picnic. *smile*
thanks groovy guys and gals.










I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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29 posted 2004-08-11 10:00 AM


LOL...I'm coming back for the words AND the photos...


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30 posted 2004-08-11 11:13 AM


I go online tomorrow at home. Providing my computer cooperates. In the words of California's governer, I'll be bock!"

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Janet Marie
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31 posted 2004-08-11 10:58 PM


Kari...be careful girlie, you'll go blind LOL *wink* thank you!!

Larry ... I dont doubt ya for a minute..thanks for stopping in groovy guy.

Heres some of my most recent shots, taken a couple weeks ago. The river (Meramec) was low and I found a sandbar that let me stand out in what would normally be the middle channel. Was so cool to be out that far.










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32 posted 2004-08-13 03:15 PM


I know... I'm seriously late for the party. *S*

But... *making excuses for myself* ... that means I get the benefit of the poem and photos and comments all at once! *S*

When I first read this, I didn't think I'd be able to choose a favorite passage because the entirety is so beautiful. *S* But with these words

"So I question everything ...
exploring each edge, following
the curves of my constant curiosity."

I think you captured part of what being a poet is... looking beyond the obvious for the inevitable layers. *S*

Excellent work! *S*

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33 posted 2004-08-13 09:19 PM


"And I wonder if this creek I worship, is as
impressed with the ripples I make in my
water inspired awakening."

Sorry it took me so long to get here Jams but I got my hand stuck on a cat's tooth...  

I could've quoted the entire poem, you know that, but this verse, for whatever reason, just makes me happy.  And I thank you for sharing with me the pics you take of that world you've found through the lens.  Oh and thanks for the tip on Shuttefly stock...  
  

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34 posted 2004-08-13 09:35 PM



I only exist when in motion with the
currents of creeks swirling over stone,
of rivers winding between white bluffs,
of lakes lapping sandy banks.

All of which hold me a "woman in waiting"
until my reprise to the reverie of shorelines
cadenced by wave curls.

I could of course do what you do and cut and paste the entire piece but I won't as this simply created a flood of euphoric emotions that are very hard to put a name to right now.  I do know one thing ~ I could kick myself for missing this and now I know what you were talking about the other day.  Lady please be specific when it comes to when you post a poem, as yours I absolutely never wish to miss, never.

You have given the elements a voice, yes you have indeed.



Their colors sustain me,
Their silence contains me,
all that's never said, will be
what explains me.

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35 posted 2004-08-13 10:38 PM


Janet Marie ... I have read this over and over and each time come away with feelings deep inside. You are an amazing writer. I know you don't post often, but when you do ... WOW!

"Time and again I am drawn here, returning
to where trees whisper the truth of the wind
and rocks keep the secrets of water."

I just loved these words. I can hear the trees whisper and I know for sure that the rocks keep secrets.

Truly a work of art.  

Huggles, Marti

Look deep, deep into nature,
and then you will understand
everything better.
           Albert Einstein

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36 posted 2004-08-13 10:42 PM


P.S. I'm back to tell you I loved the pictures and felt transformed to this place. Thank you for sharing them with us.  

Marti

Janet Marie
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37 posted 2004-08-14 12:17 PM


My goodness, you guys are so good to me..
Im going to bed with a big smile on my face... I'll be back in the morning to thank you all properly... We are getting ready to move, and its crazy here with all the packing and preparations..

(and?  shhhhhh...dont tell but I snuck off to the creek today.)

the moth will be back.
thank you.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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38 posted 2004-08-14 01:40 AM


If your tootsies were in the creek today, those twiddling toes were probably creating a symphony that creek will not soon forget.
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39 posted 2004-08-14 10:17 AM


Ruth ...  no need for excuses...I'm always late, all that matters is you came and played in the creek. *S*  Thank you girlie for the insightful response...yes...there is much inspiration to be found and my poet eyes and camera eye is always looking. LOL Thanks Ruth.

Dunc ... One of these days we will learn to resist those kittens yaya ( I could have said Tigerboyeeeees) LMAO.  Yeah..me thinks I need rehab for my Fugi-fever and Shutterfly should name a wing after me...lol Thanks Dunc. ykikyk

Sharon ... Thank you dear for such sweet reply ... I love what you said about giving the elements a name... I feel like they give me breath ... as for sneaking there yesterday, lol
I took 4 rolls of film in about an hour ... but the best part was sitting in the middle of the creek on a big rock in the sun and listening to the water flow by. It has such a ethereal, and restoring effect on me. The next few weeks are going to be taken with the move and I know I wont have many chances to go there till we get settled in so I went for it. I always have me creek shoes in the car.  lol  thank you Sharon.

Marti ... what a wonderful reply... thank you so much for your generosity and support of my work, and I love that you feel the magic of this beautiful place thru the photos...I love being able to share its beauty in this medium. Thank you kind poetess.


THANK YOU ALL for the awesome response to this poem.

~~~~~~~~~~~~













I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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40 posted 2004-08-15 04:09 AM


Hi there my poet pet.

What a wonderful title and I love the pictures you've taken. The peace that saturates these words and the scenes is truly wonderful...And, this is so you...

"'Til then I am resplendently restless ...
urged on by all that I have yet to witness.
Enticed by euphoric explorations and
defined by the discoveries, seduced by
the sky in it's resonating rituals of renewal."

Beautiful work and I'm happy to see you're enjoying your new hobby so much.

I love this read!

Eric

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41 posted 2004-08-15 04:23 AM


This paints such a vivid picture of both the outdoors and introspection. A message well written and well received.  It speaks to me in layers, on so many levels.  I have written many words, and ready myriad more; however, it is rare that you find a writing that is composed of such brilliance that it rivals the writings of our most revered poets.  I was absolutely in awe of the deftness, the flow, and the meanings contained in this poem.  You are incredibly gifted.  This should find printed pages very easily.  A keeper for sure!  This would be one for the record books if you asked me.  Thank you for sharing it.

Warm regards,

Kevin

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42 posted 2004-08-15 06:35 AM


waking up to such beautiful pictures and words that I somehow missed...

could drift away in comfort...

makes me wish to take that long bike ride I haven't done in over a year...

just wonderful words and views, JM

M

Janet Marie
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43 posted 2004-08-15 01:17 PM


E-babes ... thank you so much groovy guy...Im so pleased you got to see this one..
thank you Eric...youre so good to me.

Kevo ... what do I say to such a humbling, generous response...my goodness...
thank you very much for such high praise... I love when I see a fellow poet investing as much in their replies as they do their poetry. I love to read others poetry as much as writing my own. Thank you again poet sir.

Maureen ... so glad you came by and found some peace in the pictures...yes...I love to ride in the early morns...I hope you will get to do that soon, It always does my spirit and mood so much good to get out of the house and spend some time talking to the trees. *S*
thank you poetess M.


thank you to all who shared some of you with me on this thread.
I appreciate it so much.

Heres a few more of this lovely state park.....















this last one is of the usually quiet creek, right after heavy spring rains...its almost flooding out of its banks...the roar of the water was awesome.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
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44 posted 2004-08-16 07:20 AM


Coming back to take it all in a second time Janet.
Just wondrous writing....

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45 posted 2004-08-16 01:46 PM


It is so darn hot here, hope you don't mind I just came for my virtual ethreal dip in your creek.  My goodness that place is absolutely glorious, and you lady do indeed give it a voice.
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46 posted 2004-08-16 06:32 PM


gee this is good, but most people would require a dictionary to get thru it; maybe you could take it down a notch for the average person to appreciate; and 45 comments?  why? what am i missing?
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47 posted 2004-08-16 07:24 PM


"and 45 comments?  why? what am i missing?"

Ahhh, I dunno....a bit of manners maybe?



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48 posted 2004-08-16 09:01 PM


"Janet Marie - Critique Message: I can only grow as a writer when I am able to see my words thru another's eyes...Constructive criticism is always welcome."

bklynboy - I am sorry you had such trouble interpreting this piece of beautiful poetry.  There is a wonderful site called dictionary.com http://dictionary.reference.com/  that I wish to suggest as a tool to keep open while reading poetry that might get you through exceptional work with more ease.  I wouldn't want you to miss out on as to why this piece got so many responses (45 is not at all unusual for this writer.) We grow in our own writing from reading the work from those that use metaphors, and emotions poetically correct, and we should indeed thank them for their efforts.  These poets teach us to be better writers ourselves.

Speaking for myself, this piece actually personifies the elements through the words of this author (personify = To think of or represent (an inanimate object or abstraction) as having personality or the qualities, thoughts, or movements of a living.) In other words, she succeeded in bringing to life a simple creek, stream, or flow of water, and connected it to human emotions through a (Poem = Writing that formulates a concentrated imaginative awareness of experience in language chosen and arranged to create a specific emotional response through meaning, sound, and rhythm)

Oh ... I just came back to say thank you for writing this calm and gentle piece of work in the chaos of my day.  

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49 posted 2004-08-16 10:26 PM


Janet Marie - It is truly a pleasure to read anything of yours, but this.....oh, the calmness....I know a place such as this, and I thankyou for taking me back there again. The pics are gorgeous as well. Hugs!

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50 posted 2004-08-17 12:08 PM


Donna, Sharon, Dunc ... thank you for the return visits.

bklynboy ... I'm not really sure how to respond to your "average question" ... and I wont be able to say it as eloquently as Sharon just did...But I can assure you I am quite "average" ... I have not attended college, have not taken any advanced writing courses...on a good day I cant spell or type. When I came to Pips...I didn't have a clue to what a personification or an alliteration was, more or less metaphor or meter...but after reading all the talented writing here, I have learned so much and it inspired me to want to try to write in new styles, learn new things...and isn't that one of the goals of a poet? To broaden their skills...learn new and better ways to express themselves? Broaden our vocabulary? Well, thats the gift I was given here... room to grow and then I was blessed with the acceptance and encouragment of my fellow poets.  As to why all the replies? like I said...I am blessed with the support of many special people, OR-- maybe they just wanted to play in the creek with me. Thank you for stopping in.


Chris... hey girlie...so glad you came and took a dip with me...Im glad you have a special place like this too... we need to have that to just get away and reconnect when things get too crazy. Thank you.


Thanks again to all of you who came by...each reply is special to me... no matter the number... its about sharing and learning from one another.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
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51 posted 2004-08-17 04:57 AM


nah, Dunc. It's prolly just a chromosome.



(That, me brooklyn boy, can be found in the dictionary under the letter "C", btw...it just sounds like a "k"--drat the English language anyway!")

Forgive me if I'm a little testy.

This lovely lady graces these blue pages with devotion, love, study and deserves more respect when she shares her own offerings than that, my unfriendly friend.

Your snide comment is unworthy of such a lady as this, and is indicative of who has an abacus for a heart and who has poetry in HERS.

She's such a lady, in fact, she probably disapproves of my own dig back at you, but I did it anyway. That was just damned insulting.

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52 posted 2004-08-17 04:58 AM


see? she's much more gracious than I...


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53 posted 2004-08-17 04:39 PM


Gee I struck a nerve and to that I apologize. It was never my intention to upset the fine people here on this mutual admiration society. Janet, I appreciate your comments and I have read your works for a while and you are good and getting better. To my other detractors, I am not rude but I guess just painfully honest. The average poster on this board receives 10-12 comments. I was curious as to why this particular contribution received so many. I was thinking out loud with my fingers rather than my lips. I appreciate the link to the dictionary but my educational background probably far exceeds most who participate here. But thanks anyway. I do find it amusing however that people have the time to reply to so many postings. I guess when you don't have anything better to do, this is as good as anything. My humbliest apologies to everyone or anyone I may have offended, upset or otherwise pissed off. I have beat myself up over this and enjoyed it so much I did it again. So if I ever chose to write what I were feeling, I can beat myself up again because I like the pain. Those who choose can retaliate with your venomous words but like a water on a ducks back, it just slides off!
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54 posted 2004-08-17 07:15 PM




If it helps any, I've heard sour grapes make excellent wine.

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55 posted 2004-08-17 07:35 PM




I fugured you got so many replies because you were so long winded...lmao...
brevity brevity brevity....

but then again...

the short form often denies beauty the subtle play of repeated sounds that mimic and reflect such a thing as moving water on stone or gravel.. the wind.. and the groan of trees in a breeze...

maybe it's a country thing.. and beng a rather illiterate hillbilly I don't know any better.. LOL

Of course... there is the overall rarity of your posting these days.. which makes it an occaision... and the fact that you have supported and commented in depths on so many people's poems that the opportunity to comment on one of yours is a treat... then again.. there is the fact that regardless of how anyone might want to make or think this place is about objective comments on poetry, it is a community of people who enjoy poetry..and may or may not.. make comments due to personal ties as much as anything...

but for me... being the dumb country hick I am... I just like rivers and streams.. and the images as well as the words.. take me back to places I have been..and remind me I have places yet to go.. so for that JM.. thank you...


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56 posted 2004-08-17 07:39 PM


Ron
From one of the ignorant masses...Thanks.  

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57 posted 2004-08-17 07:56 PM


maybe it's a country thing

lol at Ron, and thanks for saying it.
Sometimes we don't get much more country than this, and Janet, you poem reminds me of when I lived very near a place like this...and still wish that I did...

so I THANK YOU for writing it more eloquent than I could have, and just for writing it....
for all of us mothy poets out here.  

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58 posted 2004-08-17 10:40 PM


bklynboy ... this typed medium is easily misread, often words are taken differently than intended...and sometimes we may not always choose our words well, we poets can be over emotional creatures. Ron built this house on a foundation of respect and tolerance, its that premise and comfort zone that allows us the room to grow as writers and feel safe in stepping outside our usual styles. We each are here for our own reasons ... some make "being here" and their writing a priority, some prefer to read poetry rather than watch TV or other daily activities.
Should anyone have to justify their level of participation... I hope not.
I thank you for the time you have given to my work.


Sharon, Sen, Ron, Dunc, Donna, thank you for caring and being protective... I love ya for having me mothy back...*heart hugs*


Me thinks its time for some more pics...
anyone wanna go play in the creek?
go fishing? Hiking?  I'll bring the picnic basket and the stink bait...LOL

Peace poets...












I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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59 posted 2004-08-17 10:43 PM


these are taken at Creve Couer Lake...
another place I spend a lot of time at.















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60 posted 2004-08-17 10:52 PM


Ron, consider yourself adopted.

Okay, I'll bite, what is stink bait?  

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61 posted 2004-08-18 10:59 AM


Stink bait?  Pretty sure I can answer that for ya Sharon.  You know all those sappy, Tigerboyeeeee poems the moth writes in weak moments???  Well, when she's all done, I feed 'em into this contraption I invented, which adds a bit of this and that, until the finished product pops out the other end as...Stink bait.  
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62 posted 2004-08-18 02:22 PM


I should have known       Here, I thought you guys invented a new type of bait down there, but then again, maybe you did?

Up here, we use salmon roe, cured in borax to catch fish, and it works like a hot darn.  Maybe this would catch her a tiger by the tail?  Who knows, it's worth a shot.

Came in from the heat for a "creek fix"       I can't wait until our rain comes and stays.  I never thought I would say it but I have had enough summer - too hot here for me.

Move over will ya?  I want to dangle my tootsies in that cool water.

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63 posted 2004-08-18 04:05 PM


Stink bait is a general term for any type of fish bait that has a strong odor. Used primarily for catfish, it often contains liver which is well aged. Some of the old timers I grew up with made their own out of chicken livers. They are about the right size for the hook, and if left to age by themselves in a warm place take no time at all to ripen into a catfish catching bouquet of semi rotted meat.

I have heard of late, that remnants of the unfinished poetry attempted  by Duncan can be used in the place of chicken livers, but that it doesn't stay on the hook as well due to a lack of substance..

LMAO

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64 posted 2004-08-18 08:50 PM


Oh! That is so gross!  Well no one ever said fish were smart I guess.  Now don't you come back in here with a smart creek fish story, I never saw one attending a school.
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65 posted 2004-08-18 08:59 PM


stink bait jokes?

gleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee--but nope, I will not go there.

Ain't a-gonna do it.

Not today. Er, tonight.

Not now.

Unless I'm BAITED!

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66 posted 2004-08-18 11:52 PM


Wakka wakka....
go ahead Sen...hook line and sinker...
or is that stinker... yayayaya

Yep....some of us are making stink bait jokes...
and then SOME of us just STINK...

aint that right DUNCAN.....

oh and Dunc???

you know what you can do with your tigerboyeee whine....



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67 posted 2004-08-20 09:29 PM


pushed back to page two huh?
mind if i bump ya back to the front? i'm sure i'm the only one who hasn't read this yet, anyway. :-P

yet, I am at a loss, lacking voice.
I understand now, it is by choice.

So I question everything ...
exploring each edge, following
the curves of my constant curiosity.


we're still in snych, and that kinda scares me.

I only exist when in motion with the
currents of creeks swirling over stone,
of rivers winding between white bluffs,
of lakes lapping sandy banks.


i get this feeling every time i paddle out and wait for the next wave...

There are words falling all around me...

...Their silence contains me,
all that's never said, will be
what explains me.


good god, that's poetry

it's not that the future is near or far...
the future's just so grim.

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68 posted 2004-08-20 11:54 PM


"This wonder and wanderlust of water
and how the sky sequesters me.
I only breathe when I am immersed
in blues and greens."

I came back for another read, and realized how much this part affected me. You are poetry, m'friend. And as I quickly scanned a handful of other replies, to my surprise JM is also a photographer par excellence!
Loving this thread, for the most part, and it'd be no surprise to me to see this thing go to page 4 or more....on it's own merit, irregardless of the fact we all love our mothy poet. LOVEYA, Kacy


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69 posted 2004-08-21 03:08 PM


ETHAN BABY!!!   ... how very cool to find you here groovy guy...
thank you so much, your replies always make me mothy heart smile...
and I love the thought of you surfing.... man I love the ocean...send me some pics.
Hope like is treating you well my friend.... post some of your magic words some time.

Kacy ... hey girlie...youre so good for me mothy spirit...thanks so much...
I know you love nature as much as I do... and I just love trying to capture the beauty on film...try to hold that moment in time....my walls are covered with water and trees...
but nothing touches being there in the real deal. Thanks for stopping back in


thanks again for all of you who came by and let me learn from you.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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70 posted 2004-08-22 05:54 AM


I am so glad that this got bumped up, I missed it when it first got posted...

Janet Marie
The words are fluid, like the river that runs through the story line, I want to float away on them, see where they take me...

Could Thoreau awaken, he would ask "what was that noise, it sounded like a timeless poet had skipped a stone on Walden"..I know he would nod and say "carry on"

Excellent poem, enjoyed greatly
----------ice
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Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
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71 posted 2004-08-22 07:37 AM


No words of mine can improve on what has been said, except my own sincerity of wish for "MORE."
So many look at outdoors without seeing it, but you've found a way to snap the soul of Ma Nature at her best.  
You weave a beautiful tale.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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72 posted 2004-08-23 08:01 AM


Ice ... what a lovely thing to say...thank you so very much poet sir for such a humbling generous reply.

Kayjay ...I loved the sincerity of your response...thank you so much kind poet.

thank you to both of you for stopping in...
and again to all who shared with me on this thread.
Heres a few more pics from some of my various hikes along the river and creek.














We go where there is love when ever we are lonely ... going back, we find,
enough love stayed behind to make us feel at home.

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*whew*
Janet....
you know I felt this soooo deeply, so completely....
pure magic girlie....
awesome doesn't even come close

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74 posted 2004-08-23 03:51 PM


Glad this got bumped or I would have missed these pictures.  You truly honor Robert Frost with those photos Jan, perfect!  I am so excited about your moving, I feel like I am sitting in the back of the moving truck.  I do fit on a shelf somewhere to collect mothy dust in the new house right?  
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75 posted 2004-08-23 08:39 PM


Good Lord Janet - I felt this in my chest . . . almost as if one could be reborn through what you have written .  . it reads as prayer . . .


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76 posted 2004-08-24 12:14 PM


Susan... thanks so much girlie...yeppers...I had a feeling you'd relate. *S*
so glad you got to play in the creek. Thanks groovy gal.

Sharon...there is always room for one of the Tiara girlies ... besides...I've seen how lovely you decorate. *L*... I'll put ya to work. Thanks dear poetess for coming back to enjoy the pics. I promised to keep adding as long as there was thanking to do. *S*

Susie ... what a lovely response..thank you so much...thats exactly the way I feel when I go there... reborn... Welcome back to the blue...so glad you joined us in the creek. *S*


thank you ALL so very much...the response to this write is both touching and overwhelming..you guys are so good to me moody muse...youd think shed let me post more than every 6 months.*LOL*















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77 posted 2004-08-24 08:49 AM


ohhhhh Janet......
I'm still loving this. The pics are gorgeous....
makes me want to hop on a plane and see it for myself NOW!

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78 posted 2004-08-24 07:06 PM


Wow. What a visual and verbal treat. Thank you for sharing your experience. You are blessed.
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79 posted 2004-08-24 11:55 PM


Donna & msflame... thanks so much for coming by and enjoying the view...yes I am very lucky...I actually live in a large suburban town..every store you need a block away...but we are far enough west of the city limits that I have several state parks, and the lake within 20 minutes drive from here...and several more very cool places on the river just a half hour or so. The only thing missing is an ocean... eventually I hope to live on the beach in a bago. LOL

thanks for your lovely replies...
heres a few more pics.















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80 posted 2004-08-24 11:59 PM


WOW!  That last picture of yours belongs on that site you sent me.  Was that doctored or natural?  Absolutely incredible JM.  I came to your poem before shutting off this computer hoping to see the tranquility of your surroundings, and I am sure glad I did.  If these were sold as cards I would purchase them all (with a little Mothy Muse inside that is!)

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81 posted 2004-08-25 12:26 PM


I'm relatively sure I'm repeating at least three other people... but amazing, visually, and verbally... you know what i mean.
-Rdz

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82 posted 2004-08-25 12:33 PM


oohhhhhh
I want to keep all the photos.
(What kind of camera/settings are you using?
What caused those intense blue reflections in two of the above photos. LOL. My daughter is asking)

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83 posted 2004-08-25 12:33 PM


That is an awesome pic, it looks like butterfly wings under the current.
BTW...Just wanted to note for the record that the stink bait aka Tigerboyeeeee poetry you usually write, rarely (if ever?) gets this kind of reception.
I'm just saying...  

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84 posted 2004-08-25 01:11 AM


Sharon and Kacy... Im using a 35 mm SLR ... the site ( Shutterfly) that I send my photos to for developing basicly turns them into digital quality and uploads them at very high resolution, thats why they are so sharp... some of the pics have been "saturated" with color...but... the color has to already be there...I cant change the colors..or warp in things that werent there to start with like you can in photo shop programs and etc...the blue for example was already there..I can enhance it and bring out what is lost to  bright sunlight, reflection etc... the blue water is what was in the shade up under the trees...I took those in late afternoon. The one with the rocks close up...those are leaves and different colored rocks under the current. Shutterfly is very cool...check em out ..its free to join and you can email your pics to people and make cool gifts with your own photos. www.shutterfly.com

Rdz9 .. thank you for your reply...I'll take an amazing no matter how many times its said.  
thanks for coming by...

DUNCAN ... .. earlier on this thread...Karen says something about "sour grapes" ... need I say more???? yayayayaya
and as for "I'm just sayin" ...
me thinks me tigerboyeee poetry does just fine......
cant believe you opened that door... lmao...............

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nice
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86 posted 2004-08-25 11:10 AM


(chuckling)...

  Duncan has so little room to talk about stink bait...


Had to visit again my friend... and view the images and remember how it was..
once upon a time.. back when

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Awe Janet Marie,
I promised I would be back...

========================================
Time and again I am drawn here, returning
to where trees whisper the truths of the wind
and rocks keep the secrets of water.
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And where my friend shares her wisdom without effort or expectation. Drawn by what you have absorbed and share so freely. Emotions expressed with ease and pictures painted in letters as pretty as leaves. No need for rain when tears flow so easy. Life so rich and full found, of course, at the source of this stream of words. Bless you sweet friend for saving up for this.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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88 posted 2004-09-02 05:56 AM


Wow Janet, enjoyed the words and the pics. This is one place I just have to visit.

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

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Of course, I had to sit here and watch a spell...As I occasionally do beside the stream that runs in front of the shack.

Thank you JM, for sharing your creek.

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90 posted 2004-09-27 03:20 PM


Vandana, Ron, Larry, Eddie, and Ed,
please forgive me for not thanking you all sooner for your kind replies...I was offline for few days and then have been on a break from here as I just moved and am still unpacking and getting "life" in some semblance of order.
Thank you for coming by and enjoying the creek with me.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue


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91 posted 2004-09-28 02:00 AM


WHOA! I'm finally here in the comment box! LOL! I read it and was going to skip on to reply, but I had to see everyone of those breathtaking pictures.

You know, the imagery is georgeous in this. It makes me feel like I'm there during, and wish I was there at the end.  

This has given just a little bit of serenity tonight, Lady. It is great to read you.

Love
the mutually admiring and amazed because it is FREAKIN' AWESOME POETRY DAMN IT!,
Jenn

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92 posted 2004-09-28 05:09 PM


So many treasures in the wealth of images.

  Greatly enjoyed!

        Robert Joseph


  

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93 posted 2004-09-28 05:34 PM


Wow, I am happy that I did come back in here to reread your words.... and to discover all those magnificent pictures! Just spectacular .... and inspiring:

Blue water dances
reflecting the sky's beauty
the heart fills with peace


Love and hugs.
Margherita

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Wonderful write dear gal...and nice pics
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95 posted 2004-09-28 08:56 PM


I read this and felt you sitting next to me...You have grown to a place I could never touch, poetry more beautiful than a photo could ever show... it flows like the river and butterflies dancing in the wind~

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96 posted 2004-09-28 10:17 PM


Jenn, Robert, Margherita, Toe, & BDC ....
thank you all for your kind words, I appreciate them so much and I am glad you found your way to "my creek"  *S* Thank you for coming by and taking the time to view all the photos too. I'm still on somewhat of a pips haitus, getting settled from moving, but will return the kindness on your poetry once I am back. Thank you all for sharing. Heres a few new pics of one of my most recent hikes to the creek and a few other scenic places I've visited.












I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue


Janet Marie
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97 posted 2004-09-28 10:32 PM


Groovy cloud days.














Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
98 posted 2004-09-29 12:28 PM



This eve a hollow heart turns toward sky
Searching again for a twinkle in your eye
The one that will to  "blue" say all is fine
All that was needed ... was just a little time

Messages of cherish resting in Luna's glow
Lighting a trust you had once come to know
Heart speaking out to put all the fears to rest
As you photograph words in front of the best

With all visions soaring above shores of peace
Yesterday's storms will falter in winds of release
An embrace of serenity massages tempo of wind
While wisps of words dance to the rhythm's bend
*************************

You already know my thoughts on this, but I did want to leave a little response to eloborate since the tides have now come into the fall and changed direction.  Tis a cool current swimming in the blue this season, but the blue is still the blue that you had never seen before.  Awesome pics btw.  Who woulda thunk you could teach a moth how to click instead of cluck in nightime burn.  

Seriously, I think this is one of your best and I do love to see you stretch.

"yet, I am at a loss, lacking voice.
I understand now, it is by choice."


That is why ya have a camera, it can talk without the waka waka wake!  


"Time and again I am drawn here, returning
to where trees whisper the truths of the wind
and rocks keep the secrets of water."


geeeezz girlie !!! whatcha got in the raspberry tea? Trees whispering?????  ( YA KNOW I taught how to hear that one) but the rocks keeping secrets ... well, ya talked them into that yourself.


"Their colors sustain me,
Their silence contains me,
all that's never said, will be
what explains me."


I knew there had to be an explanation somewhere, somehow, by someone, to explain how a moth could type.  I can't wait to hear it either.  

Who knows the same wind you ride in your wake of release baby?  



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99 posted 2004-09-29 12:32 PM


AAAACCCCKKKK!!!!!!!!  
Where's my tigerboyeeeee rifle?????  

Parker
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100 posted 2004-09-29 01:17 AM


Well I come for a little visit and look what pops up. Janet it was such a pleasure this evening to see your name pop up after my long absence and to read such an amazing and wonderful poem. You drew me in with this jem. I've missed this place and reading you and all the great poets here.
So do you Need a partner to go frolicing in the stream beds.

Are those your feet, did I tell you I have a foot fetish.

hmmmm.

Parker


1slick_lady
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101 posted 2004-09-29 03:14 AM


breathtaking

Janet Marie
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102 posted 2004-09-29 09:15 AM


Mark ... anyone ever tell ya your replies are poetry..
yeah...me thinks youve heard that before. *S*
Thank you for your enlightening response--
Yes...youknowthatIknowthatyouknow...
YOU always just know.........
thank you MC

    

Dunc...lmao...you cant take down this tigerboyeeeeee..
after all...we are talking about an AQUARIAN Tigerboyeee.
heh  

P-man... long time no see groovy guy...welcome back..and thank you for your kind words...SO? will that sailboat fit in me creek? LOL ... A foot fetish? Well...that explains your "arch" attraction.  

Helen.. thank you for coming by and playing in the creek.  

thank you all, everyone of you who has come by on this for your lovely eloquence to this poem and my photos...I will be back on a somewhat more regular basis once I get settled from moving.


I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue


Patricia
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103 posted 2004-10-03 08:42 AM


I sure chose the right day to visit...
Absolutely beautiful in every way.

Patricia

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104 posted 2005-06-15 12:16 PM


"the curves of my constant curiosity.

This wonder and wanderlust of water
and how the sky sequesters me."

nodding

you make me wanna look up more often



another fave rave

Dark Angel
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105 posted 2005-06-15 12:35 PM


what a pleasure it is to feel your words flow....over me and all around...again.



mxx

"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

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106 posted 2005-06-15 02:02 AM


Look at that!  3 Gemini girlies in a row, wanting to spent the day at the creek with you   My absolute favorite of all lines - "words falling all around me" and you know what, I am sure they do 24 hours a day.  I just wish there were 27 hours a day, so you could write one poem a day to tell us what you saw.  This is a FAV, and never have I looked at blue the same again.
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107 posted 2007-10-27 05:34 PM


love it,

ARCTIC WIND

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