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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2004-08-09 09:44 PM



I hear echos on nearby loon lake at night
and feel myself fall
as the sun dips into the bay,
within the touch of a memory.

A summer’s night long ago,
caught in a driftwood moment,
capturing my downcast eyes and heart.
I make circles in the sand with my bare feet,
feeling the heat of the day lingering
all the way up and down my spine,
as if your breath had reached my neck
in a salty taste of flesh,
infusing me with permanent pleasure.
Your hand, your inner warmth flowing,
caressing my shoulder softly
as you turn me 'round to face you
in the salty air.
A feathered touch, smoother than silk
yet sensibly strong, resilient,
capable of holding the world at bay.

Waves of passing time took you away.

There is not much for me to say today
except, I miss you.

And as the ebony of midnight cries forth
from the sheer force it takes to push the heat of day away,
a lone loon glides gracefully by, serenely,
beyond the willows that line the sandy bay.

Just beyond my reach,
in the sharing of a lover’s echo,
I recall the sound of your voice.

I miss you more
on the warmest nights,
more than in a chilling mist.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (08-10-2004 10:02 AM).]

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1 posted 2004-08-09 10:23 PM


love this
that's all,
just love it
has a "natural" sensuality

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2 posted 2004-08-09 10:26 PM


thank you, sweet Kraw
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3 posted 2004-08-09 10:57 PM


Midnitesun, this was warm and lovely.  Thank goodness we have memories and echoes like these beautifies to warm us when the flesh is gone.....*hugs*....jo
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4 posted 2004-08-09 10:58 PM


I see what you mean.
Beautiful write. Hugs,
TD

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5 posted 2004-08-10 03:54 AM


yes...beautiful...


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6 posted 2004-08-10 08:12 AM


And just beyond my reach,
but in the sharing of a lover’s echo,
I recall the sound of your voice.

And I miss you more
on the warmest nights,
more than in a chilling mist.


these people and the essense of them, make us who we are, taking us by the hand, sometimes for a little while, and sometimes for a lifetime...

wonderfully articulated, very much enjoyed this

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7 posted 2004-08-10 08:16 AM


heard the loons at mandan lake years ago..
thought they were wolves way off..
hollow fear in a voice
yet they were bragging


this is an image of that vibe...way cool

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8 posted 2004-08-10 08:41 AM


ah... very nicely done ma'am.. well told and holds both the sense of nature and how it effects and plays into our lives/memories.... as well as the emtional ripples of honesty that spread along the lines.. letting us know there is more to the story..and that it is ok to leave it unsaid.. ok for us to just know there is more...

bravo!

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9 posted 2004-08-10 09:31 AM


ah Kacy I do believe this just became my favorite of yours...
this draws on so much emotion and heart...
just love this...

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10 posted 2004-08-10 10:05 AM


Kacy, that may be my all-time favourite reads of your poetry! ~ and that is saying a great deal!!!

Love & Light,
Linda
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11 posted 2004-08-10 10:07 AM


I'm happy this one echos for the reader. If I keep working on it, hopefully the loon's echo will resonate clearly.
Thanks, friends.

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12 posted 2004-08-10 10:52 AM


Kacy-girl...Im taking this gem of pen for me...mine mine..Im keeping it.
so this is for you...

(awesome write)... *major moth sigh*

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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13 posted 2004-08-10 02:52 PM


Beautiful!

Eric

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14 posted 2004-08-10 02:57 PM


(chuckling)...

I knew when I read this it was going to be well received... it is that well done ma'am... so hats off to you... now.. take a bow..

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15 posted 2004-08-10 04:15 PM


quote:
A feathered touch, smoother than silk
yet sensibly strong, resilient,
capable of holding the world at bay.



Great atmosphere in this beautiful poem!
Love, Margherita

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16 posted 2004-08-10 05:03 PM


Ah Kacy...I would like to see more memories....


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17 posted 2004-08-10 07:05 PM


Cpat, you tryin to make me cry? LOL, thanks
JM, what an honor

Thanking each of you, for your generously warm replies.
I'm really delighted you like this piece.

The loon my totem spirit.

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18 posted 2004-08-10 07:08 PM


"caught in a driftwood moment"...man, you make me say I wish I would have thought of that
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19 posted 2004-08-10 07:11 PM


smiling a thank you
I'll loan it to you

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20 posted 2004-08-11 03:10 AM


JM, I liked that picture so much I put it on my desktop thanks again!
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21 posted 2004-08-11 07:46 AM


Many years ago, in the morning mists of New Hampshire, a reporter, ghosting in a canoe to tell the tale of NH loons, was stopped by a voice stating "Hold it right there."  It was the "Loon Ranger."
I awoke this am to a calling loon.  I smiled to find one in your writing.  Well done!!  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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22 posted 2004-08-11 10:02 AM


The Loon Ranger? LOL, I'd enjoy reading more about this mis-adventure...a poem piece hiding in there? Maybe a HI-HO silver in there somewhere?
Good Morning, Ken.

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23 posted 2004-08-11 05:15 PM


At your service, milady.
At one time, NH loon pairs were numbered around 500.  State fish and wildlife people realized that nesting pairs had dwindled to around 250.  As usual, there were the usual cries of every thing from "let's help the loons" to "leave them alone."  When a reporter from the Wall Street Journal went up to see for himself, he attempted to discover a nesting pair (thus interfering with their habitat). He was stopped by a state ranger(the aforementioned "loon ranger").  There was no mention of Tonto, Silver or Scout.  
There was a citing of two loons who mistook a puddle in a Baltimore shopping mall for a lake and dropped in for a nosh.  However, loons need to taxi up to flying speed, hence they need deeper water than a puddle.  Eventually, they were safely captured and transported to Chesapeake Bay.  
End of loon lesson.  Keep writing, Kacy, you do a wondrous job!!  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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24 posted 2004-08-12 03:09 AM


Ken, that is quite a story! LOL, I like the way you embellished the event with your personal touch of humor.
Thank you, for taking time to read my posts, and especially for your generously kind comments.

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