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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-08-09 12:02 PM



Capture Your Heart

tonight you don’t need
a reason to miss me
for I send to you a gift
of crickets playing strings
a lullaby whispered on the wind
do they capture your heart?
and hang starred lights against
the darkest pleats of velvet
setting the perfect stage
for the moon to dance
skin to skin with the night
just open the window to
know my presence there
the air stirs my perfume
there is your reminder
as I softly walk rice paper
to your dreams

"i need a hand to help build up some kind of hope inside of me"  TRAIN



© Copyright 2004 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-08-09 12:05 PM


precious
EagleScorpion
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2 posted 2004-08-09 01:57 PM


yes..

reminds me of my girlfriend who now lives 2000 miles away.

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2004-08-09 02:49 PM


I'm going to have to hire you to decorate my bedroom.


(That could be taken "funny" huh?)

Oh what the hell, baby, let's give 'em something to talk about! (Haven't we always? )

But this is what I'm talking 'bout:

"and hang starred lights against
the darkest pleats of velvet"

and

"as I softly walk rice paper"

gorgeous images, gorgeous you!

icebox
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4 posted 2004-08-09 04:57 PM


Who ever said real magik can't be simple.  
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Gaia
5 posted 2004-08-09 10:30 PM


oh, I liked that rice paper imagery
iliana
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6 posted 2004-08-09 10:51 PM


The rice paper walk got me, too!  Much enjoyed! ....jo
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7 posted 2004-08-09 11:04 PM


Kacy beat me to it.

and the window stays open
as long as crickets sing . . .

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8 posted 2004-08-11 01:10 AM


captured for sure
Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2004-08-11 08:24 AM


rice nice ms slick kewl too
LeeJ
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10 posted 2004-08-11 08:42 AM


a beautiful write, one with care and generous feeling.

Enjoyed.

Kahlil
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11 posted 2004-08-11 09:40 AM


"setting the perfect stage
for the moon to dance
skin to skin with the night"
yummmmmmyyyyyyyyyy
K

JamesMichael
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12 posted 2004-08-11 07:12 PM


Nice...James
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13 posted 2004-08-12 05:18 AM


very  nice


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liked this much
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