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Martie
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0 posted 2004-08-07 08:52 PM


Lessons from Rock and River

Color the canyon walls
warm adobe
fire hearths of brick
warm
places in the heart

listen

The river flows
past hard and stable rock
two different forms of matter
each by uniqueness
gives importance to the other
a perfect relationship

Harmonize with things
that flow by you
like the rock
I think
sweep gracefully past
the stunning fact
impeding
gesture with sound
that delights  

   then

Sky dark
clouds dense charcoal
the rain stitching lines from sky to earth
in the canyon,
next to the river

Thunder trembles
the sky to open
the flowing current
steady
    pounding
the river surges
sending hard and stable rock
careening
    far

The rock
as others catch against it
changes the path
of the river
  flowing
     growing
        flooding

The world's ever changing
nothing stays the same
I think
----
1-7-00


[This message has been edited by Martie (08-08-2004 12:47 PM).]

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1 posted 2004-08-07 08:59 PM


I enjoyed this.  Imagining that rock,  standing
against the current...could be one's spirit
as well.  

Hugs to ya dear one....

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2 posted 2004-08-07 09:17 PM


I really love reading your poems, Martie.  This was took me on a journey and I thank you for the wisdom of it.   ....jo
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3 posted 2004-08-08 12:55 PM


Loved the images, and yes nothing ever seems to stay the same. But one has to ask, is that such a bad thing?

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Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

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5 posted 2004-08-08 07:29 AM


Martie,
And you are the spray that caught me this day.

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6 posted 2004-08-08 07:43 AM


excellent!
Love the way this flows, like the river, it is as stable as the rocks, even when they move , changing form, breaking down slowly into sand as they go...just like this poem that tapers as the story progresses..
enjoyed
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7 posted 2004-08-08 09:11 AM


There is much of solidity in this, but also the sense of the water eroding the rock...and the rock going away.  You've found a wonderful metaphor.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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8 posted 2004-08-08 10:03 AM


ah, wise, and told with great imagery.

  susan

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9 posted 2004-08-08 10:19 AM


Most things change because we make them change -- intentionally or not. My wish is to be the water, because it doesn't change. Unfortunately I seem to be the rock, and I do depart after endless assault. I can feel it happening exactly now.

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10 posted 2004-08-08 12:34 PM


very beautiful Martie!

sigh...

I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me
I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind

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11 posted 2004-08-08 12:44 PM


this is what I think too
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12 posted 2004-08-12 04:33 PM


Martie - what wonders you work with words - your poetry is so special and then so are you - thanks for reposting this - Paul
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13 posted 2004-08-12 06:20 PM


MartieSis~
Indeed, and are we not all shaped by the flow of word-water as it washes over us, moving us ?
I think ... no, I KNOW ... yes~
Thank you sweet one~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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14 posted 2004-08-12 07:42 PM


Martie,
I see myself as the water today, going with the flow in the face of the day's adversities, and watching those adversities wash away. Thank you for the reminder to harmonize, beautiful metaphor.

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15 posted 2004-08-12 10:34 PM


and me thinks you thinks correctly, my friend...wonderful read!

jwesley

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