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Ribbons in the Wind
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Ribbons in the Wind |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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If I had one dream to offer A smile to give, perhaps, to proffer, I’d basket it in woven reeds Of sentimental ribboned scene, A river bedded grassy sway. On checkered blanket I would lay And love you all the sunny day. But I’ve no dream like this to hold. It died its death and time has told Summer days are growing old. Shuttered out the wind, you say That’s the reason you can’t be Romantic picnic loving me. My ribbons lost to fantasy. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 touching write |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A bittersweet picnic, this~ But the colorful ribbons are what carried me. Very pretty write, iliana~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
inevitable like the last lick on an icecream cone, summer romance withers as the days of fall grow near  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yes, like "Ribbons in the Wind" ~ what a poetically poignant way of expressing such emotions...   Linda |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You paint pretty pictures, Jo... sad, but tender... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
that last line is gripping!!  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Wow Jo, this is simply exquisite. So tender, sad, and yet so lovely . . . SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A tender write, Jo, showing the ... tender side of a woman. Perhaps from fantasy comes reality because ... well, we have the "power" don't we? |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
It has been said, that love is a gift we give ourselves... If that is true...how rich we are. TD |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
very lovely.....very touching... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Touching thoughts as Summer begins its end game.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Jo, you write beautifully, sometimes sad, but always beautiful thoughts that we each can relate well to. Thank You for this. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A beautiful dream, Jo...and I think I have had a few that are similar.  |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Read and enjoyed Even through its dark sadness, I see light Keep that blanket clean and handy While you live in fantasy, the ribbons are capable of entangling a new reality at any moment. -------ice ><> |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Not lost, I think...only mislaid. At least I hope it will be so, that one of these days you'll pass the place you left them, and -- ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I enjoyed this Jo - very much |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Ahhh but ribbons of fantasy have a magic all their own...as seasons change so too does the fantasy evolve...not lost just different...heartfelt writing... |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
sad but beautiful, found myself choking up, just thinking about my own experiences........ |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
On checkered blanket I would lay And love you all the sunny day .... reminds me of a day long ago , made me a little lonesome ... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jo~ This entire piece is so wistfully pretty~ Admiration for you dear poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed....James |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
pulling my heartstrings...so wistful and fanciful....and bittersweet. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This really touches the heart! Great emotions expressed so beautifully. Love, Margherita |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Yes, definitely sad and tender.... This aches, and yet it still holds love within it. Plus, it has perfect flow and pulls the reader in. I miss having the chance to be in here and read you... I hope you are taking care.Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Jo, this made me cry because it had me envisioning the yellow ribbons you see all over trees, representing our soldiers overseas and prayers in wishing them safety and a safe return home! (wipes tears) It breaks my heart envisioning a young twenty-something soldier telling his girlfriend or high school sweetheart he's heading off to the battlefield and then hugging her close as she cries, and for over a year now she has an empty picnic basket on her end table where she sits reading newspapers, trying to find solace in when he may return home to her and they can share their next romantic picnic together! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ahhh... I know this reality check too well. *S* Beautifully written! *S* |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Your poem truly touched me... Thank you for this most enjoyed read... *~coco~* |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Jo, Truly inspired, I'd say. Exquisite. miscellanea |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Lady, you have no idea the gifts you give thank you a thousand times for your honest ta goodness up close and personnel views of communing with nature. Beautiful! Hugs Lee J. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sad, but very beautiful and very well done. |
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