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choshi
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0 posted 2004-08-06 10:07 AM



An offered rose,
with all its thorns and petals,
blood red, fresh with life--
bursting forth from the blue vase
perched on the fireplace mantle.

© Copyright 2004 Paul C. Cooper - All Rights Reserved
Susan
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1 posted 2004-08-06 10:17 AM


I see it.  Well written.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

choshi
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2 posted 2004-08-06 11:16 AM


Thank you Susan...
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3 posted 2004-08-06 11:42 AM


choshi
Enjoyed the read.

choshi
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4 posted 2004-08-06 12:34 PM


Thank you Sy, glad you enjoyed....~P
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5 posted 2004-08-06 01:46 PM


choshi,
  It is soooo good to read your poetry again.  It's refreshing!
                miscellanea

iliana
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6 posted 2004-08-06 01:49 PM


Paul, this was a beautiful, vivid offering!  Much enjoyed, my friend.   ....jo
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7 posted 2004-08-06 02:15 PM



An offered rose,
with all its thorns and petals,
blood red, fresh with life--
bursting forth from the blue vase
perched on the fireplace mantle.


thorns and petals
petals and thorns;

if i shower you
with the colors of my magic flowers,
will you kiss my boo boo
when the thorns must fall upon me?

Margherita
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8 posted 2004-08-06 07:22 PM


A true offering of love  ..... Beautifully said.

quote:
blood red, fresh with life ..


Love, Margherita

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9 posted 2004-08-07 10:18 AM


LOL at inkedgoddess' thorn reply, yet it was a good one, too

I enjoyed this, could almost see a perched rose on my countertop

vandana
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10 posted 2004-08-07 10:28 AM


enjoy your read
choshi
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11 posted 2004-08-07 11:48 AM


LOL at inkedgoddess' thorn reply, yet it was a good one, too

I enjoyed this, could almost see a perched rose on my countertop


Thorny, yet very open and vulnerable and I am hoping to respond with a poem when something ripens into consciousness.....

I am glad that you enjoyed this one Kacy....    ~P

choshi
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12 posted 2004-08-07 11:50 AM


choshi,
  It is soooo good to read your poetry again.  It's refreshing!
                miscellanea


Thank you ~M, Its nice to be meeting you and I will look forward to reading your poems....~P

choshi
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13 posted 2004-08-07 11:51 AM


Paul, this was a beautiful, vivid offering!  Much enjoyed, my friend

Thank you Jo, I am glad you enjoyed and felt the vividness...   ~P

choshi
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14 posted 2004-08-07 11:52 AM


A true offering of love  ..... Beautifully said.


quote:
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blood red, fresh with life ..
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Love, Margherita
Awww, Thank you Margherita,   Love   ~P

choshi
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15 posted 2004-08-07 11:55 AM


thorns and petals
petals and thorns;

if i shower you
with the colors of my magic flowers,
will you kiss my boo boo
when the thorns must fall upon me?

~~~~~~<@>~~~~~~

From one root,
emerging petals and thorns
in-between-
rainbow hues of the dream space
the healing of shared hearts.

inkedgoddess
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16 posted 2004-08-07 05:15 PM



From one root,
emerging petals and thorns
in-between-
rainbow hues of the dream space
the healing of shared hearts.


yes, yes good interception!!!!
but i'll still take a kiss for the boo boo.

inkedgoddess
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17 posted 2004-08-07 05:17 PM



From one root,
emerging petals and thorns
in-between-
rainbow hues of the dream space
the healing of shared hearts.


yes!! good interception from total collapse.....lol
but i'd still like a kiss on the boo boo

choshi
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18 posted 2004-08-07 05:28 PM


yes!! good interception from total collapse.....lol
but i'd still like a kiss on the boo boo

Only "a kiss?"
....         

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19 posted 2004-08-07 05:50 PM


~ and I enjoyed your pretty, poetic "offering"!

Flowers
EA

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20 posted 2004-08-08 03:47 AM


a beautiful vision
choshi
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21 posted 2004-08-08 05:53 AM


Thank you Earth Angel,  Glad that you enjoyed

Thank you Dixie....~P

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22 posted 2004-08-08 08:19 AM


An offered rose,
with all its thorns and petals,

~*~

More to this than is first seen...the last three lines make me see it,
but the first two lines make me feel...

more is there than meets the eye.

choshi
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23 posted 2004-08-08 10:10 AM


More to this than is first seen...the last three lines make me see it,
but the first two lines make me feel...

more is there than meets the eye.

Thank you Karilea, you are a deep and sensitive reader as you are a writer...    ~P

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24 posted 2004-08-08 03:15 PM


an offering of beauty new,
a sacrifice of love to you.
and in the peace it sings
would not its treasures bring
more substance to its intent
if this gift was kept
rather than sent
and breathed its life for you
through window view...

than left drying in a vase?


nice to see you Paul
missed you

choshi
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25 posted 2004-08-09 01:55 AM


an offering of beauty new,
a sacrifice of love to you.
and in the peace it sings
would not its treasures bring
more substance to its intent
if this gift was kept
rather than sent
and breathed its life for you
through window view...

than left drying in a vase?

Such questions,
as the summer sun blazes strong;
petals dry and fall-
whether left in an unseen field
or gifted freely from the heart.



nice to see you Paul
missed you

Nice to see you too Dawn .... Thank you for the gift of your inspired words    ~P

hoot_owl_rn
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26 posted 2004-08-09 09:57 AM


Simply lovely
choshi
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27 posted 2004-08-09 06:00 PM


Thank you Hoot Owl Rn          ~P
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