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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-08-05 05:39 PM



Reaching Through Time

It was just the other side of you
that I turned over one day.
Not too well done,
as I reached through time
to capture a taste
and dream your fears.

Sometimes I love you,
when the moment at hand
produces titles
to free my mind of circumstances
and walk whichever way alliteration
sends a stranded soul seeking silence.

I would tender care you
in wishful thinking,
would pause the season's
silken soft nights
spending thoughts
that would honor you.

Instead tonight,
I serenade my mind
with understanding,
thinning my wants until limp,
waiting for the warmth,
watchful of the last vision
to accompany an adaptation
of this evening's final dance.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2004-08-05 05:47 PM


Dear Maureen, this is a wonderful piece!
Love, Margherita

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2004-08-05 06:08 PM


final dance my friend?


Susan
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walking the surreal
3 posted 2004-08-05 07:14 PM


Sorrow in soft motion-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Magnus
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4 posted 2004-08-05 09:05 PM


M.,  you write supreme poetry.  Don't ever
feel otherwise.  You truly do...

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2004-08-05 09:27 PM


..."Instead tonight,
    I serenade my mind
    with understanding,"

~ I want to absorb those lines into my own mind!

A delicate and classy piece of writing!
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6 posted 2004-08-05 09:32 PM


'thinning my wants until limp'

this is a very forceful locution... it's framed well by the balance of your thoughts

Duncan
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7 posted 2004-08-05 09:37 PM


"Sometimes I love you,
when the moment at hand
produces titles
to free my mind of circumstances
and walk whichever way alliteration
sends a stranded soul seeking silence."

Very cool write Maureen, alliteratively speaking...  


iliana
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8 posted 2004-08-06 01:24 AM


Maureen, this is such a sad, tender write.  That last verse really got to me.   ....jo
passing shadows
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9 posted 2004-08-06 02:18 AM


you always touch the heart
BluesSerenade
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10 posted 2004-08-06 03:36 AM


Timing is everything, and it's a pitty it's not always on our side.
I know this sounds silly (coming from me) but we are the only ones
who can open or close that door.

And you gotta love the idea of someone breaking it down.  

Love you Maur~  Loved your poem!

Paul Wilson
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11 posted 2004-08-06 07:37 AM


Maureen...As always, a pleasure too read you
Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Decaflame
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12 posted 2004-08-06 09:27 AM


when the moment at hand
produces titles
to free my mind of circumstances
and walk whichever way alliteration
sends a stranded soul seeking silence.

~*~

and straight to the pen
you found solitude...


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