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Summer Haze
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Summer Haze |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Summer Haze Sun is playing boo peek, hiding behind long wish-washed pale blue layers holding bleached spots with dull edges, giving a new feel to soft sensations, good vibrations covering, coveting downed sides and lifted chins… and we never think that sun eyedrops on lovers, hidden beneath trees or even out in open grasses, exploring anew old lines with shadows and southern comfort re-designing words like shockwaves into reformed awakenings… and funny how years fall away when chemistry renews what once was thought over and done, oh/god/(ess)/yes, while silence is filling hearts as, bereft gone are all words, though sounds still dance on summerwinds butterflies tickling sunbared skin and windsongs tickle underbellies while even ever envious clouds join as huge, melding molten edges, entangling their see us dance in an embrace so hard, that their own tears softly fall adding to the lush of must. Somewhere a birdsound clears the air Re mem ber me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah.. now this.. this is good... honest in its depths of emotion and in its imagery played metaphors... very nicely done ma'am |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
beautifully done.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
when you write like this, I love every word and image... M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is wonderful Soleil. Some of the images are just what I needed to give me that push out the door back to Quiet Waters. Hugs! ~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
My, beautiful . . . SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"butterflies tickling sunbared skin" ~ how delightful! I loved the lazy, hazy summery feel to this write!   EA |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
beautiful is right - I could see it all |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"and we never think that sun eyedrops on lovers, hidden beneath trees or even out in open grasses, exploring anew old lines with shadows and southern comfort re-designing words like shockwaves into reformed awakenings…" Love the "southern comfort" reference. Reminds me of a day not long ago that I've been trying to get into verse ever since. Enjoyed the read Soleil...  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Oh this is sweet-on-sweet! Direct to my library -- you really outdid yourself with this one. This one really took me....I was half done reading it, and realized that this was my second time through. I'd hit the end and started over without even thinking about it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Soleil This is beautiful beautiful!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh I miss summer.. and you've made me miss it even more,  and that's a good thing.  Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. ~Stevie Nicks~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"and windsongs tickle underbellies while even ever envious clouds join as huge, melding molten edges, entangling their see us dance in an embrace so hard, that their own tears softly fall adding to the lush of must" Beautiful writing, beautiful imagery, and I am going back to the days of my youth now...for some beautiful memories. Thanks for the lovely sharing.  ....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
such a beautiful piece a treasure indeed |
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